Open Poetry #1 |
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Hands of Shame |
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snacks Junior Member
since 1999-08-21
Posts 35NJ |
I can't recall the soul I lost when summer turned to sudden frost. Forever living in the lie that blindness prompts the truth to die. In the night the demon sings a lullaby of sharp bee stings. The clown of all my early dreams collapses from its damaged seams. A river washed away my past, but in the night the dream comes fast. Circling bees around my head; tempted by life to pray to be dead. Force away the hands of shame. Grant the child one less pain. Paying for another's sins is a lifetime fight that no one wins. Save the loyal, kill the rules. Remove your child from silenced schools. It's time we learn the crucial game that frees us all from hands of shame. ------------------ God is seen always in a child's eyes |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
I don't know why no one replied to this poem. I liked the meter and the flow.. and the message behind it. Good work. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Lucie...I agree....can't believe I missed it!!! |
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Elizabeth![]() ![]()
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
I just found it too. We all ought to read this one and take it to heart. ------------------ *Elizabeth* "Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low, But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..." |
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snacks Junior Member
since 1999-08-21
Posts 35NJ |
I'm glad some of you were able to read it and that it meant something. It certainly meant a lot to me when I wrote it..(a long time ago)..thanks for the feedback.. |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
It's wonderful, snacks. Very well-written, and moving. ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Well, count me among the blind. Sometimes it takes time for these things to get noticed properly. This poem is great. It is polished and well written. Thank you very much. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
ME TOO ![]() |
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