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My Lover |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Unsure, I dare to look into your eyes. I tilt your head to me with gentle care. Your kiss is both my reward and my prize. I feel your body press up against mine. The heat coming from you feeds my desire. Pouting lips glow with the hue of red wine. The love in my heart becomes a bonfire. To the song in our hearts we will dance. The love between us will always be there. Entwining our arms we find romance. Locked in this embrace we haven't a care. The pain of that memory has been bled. For three years now my lover has been dead. ©1999 DreamEvil ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW, Dream, this is beautiful. But sad also |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Here I was ready to say how romantic! Then wow, what a twist at the end! 'Twas romance with a sad ending! Great job! What a surprise! |
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Cinderella Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 152Arizona |
How touching....Wonderful! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Tragicly sad |
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Gentle Soul Member
since 1999-07-12
Posts 273Vinton,Ohio USA |
wow brother.. productive nite I see.. this is good as usual love..  ------------------ Gënt£ë¤§°û£ |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
How many times have I been unpleasantly surprised with an ending like this  The meter in this one is great, DE. Is it a true experience?------------------ *Elizabeth* "Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low, But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..." |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
beautiful and sad...I love it. ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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miriam Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 323glendale,ca. |
great twist at the end. But still...im sorry if it's true for you. ------------------ miriam coronado |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Romance with a dark side, hmm? Light some candles! Illuminate yourself. |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Dream, this is a beautiful dark side to romance... I like it... ------------------ ~onevoice~ "She looked at her life like lines, never-ending, constantly forming, reforming and bending." |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
If you left off the last two lines, you would have a perfect love poem! With the last two, you have a perfect love poem that's sad!  |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
What a twist at the end, Dream...took me by surprise..exellent work, beautifully sad. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* I see the world through the loving eyes of my heart, and suffer the pain of unfulfilled visions. -- Daniel L. Miller |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Ouch ... dead metaphorically, I hope? Excellent poem. ------------------ "Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus" (Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.") |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Ah, You got me on this one - didn't see how you could possibly turn this one so sad with just two lines left. A sweet yet sad Sonnet. Good work. Michael |
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thursdayschild Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 169Houston, Tx. |
Quite a rotation...as the reader is seductively drawn in to these sweet words of love, then totally shocked into sadness.  Well written, as always. |
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