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amber
Member

since 1999-06-15

Posts 240
los banos, ca,

0 posted 1999-08-30 03:44 AM

was her kiss as beautiful,
as you claim mine are,
did you touch her softly,
beneath hidden stars,
forgetting of my existance?

was it impossible to tell her,
that you could never hurt me,
the love that you promise,
becomes impossible to see,
because tears blurr my vision.

looking in my eyes,
face to face,
pain is written clearly,
and taken its place,
deep within my soul.

you hold me close,
trying to kiss away,
the confusion youve caused,
but the wind starts to play,
the same familar song.

i hear nothing, see nothing,
beyond your eyes, your lips,
and i find myself agian,
dying in your kiss,
because i let you hurt me so.

~one voice~
Senior Member

since 1999-07-08

Posts 664
Billings, MT USA

1 posted 1999-08-30 04:49 AM

Oh Amber.. this is such a sickening feeling indeed... I'm so sorry that you had to experience it. Beautifully put in to words though!

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~onevoice~

"She looked at her life
like lines, never-ending,
constantly forming,
reforming and bending."

Elizabeth

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Member Ascendant

since 1999-06-07

Posts 6871
Minnesota

2 posted 1999-08-30 11:11 AM

What a blow-so sorry...you deserve much better...but you did a great job putting it into a poem.

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

3 posted 1999-08-30 03:54 PM

Amber,
You did a fine job on a sad kiss.
I just wrote of a kiss and I will
put it on board now. *L*

caroline
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since 1999-08-16

Posts 1218
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4 posted 1999-08-30 08:02 PM

Amber...*hugs*...such pain in your heart, yet such splendor in your pen. Well done.

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...

amber
Member

since 1999-06-15

Posts 240
los banos, ca,

5 posted 1999-08-31 01:48 AM

thanks for all of your comments. i appreciate them deeply. this poem means alot to me, i can still feel the disgust in my stomach everytime i read it. thanks agian for reading.

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

6 posted 1999-08-31 07:05 AM

Put the poem away and move on...he's not worth one more second. Be grateful for the pain only because it helped you create such a lovely poem!

amber
Member

since 1999-06-15

Posts 240
los banos, ca,

7 posted 1999-08-31 04:14 PM

thank you very much, ive told myself that so many times, but often i cant force myself to go through with it. sometimes its hard to leave, all youve ever known, even if they break your heart. thank you for your time!

Emmy
Member

since 1999-06-29

Posts 194
KY

8 posted 1999-08-31 08:14 PM

So sorry, so sorry... what an awful thing to go through; been down that road before, and it wasn't an easy trip. At least you have pencil and paper to help you vent. Wonderful work.

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