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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Somebody say something about this? Pleeeeease? ------------------ *Elizabeth* "Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low, But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..." |
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pen of passion Member
since 1999-08-11
Posts 234 |
Hey I like it; especially the last two-rhyme lines. |
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Stephanie Robinson New Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 5 |
I really liked this. It makes me think of someone I know. She hides behind a mask herself but when I'm around her she seems to take it of and let the pain out. I help her in every way that I know how to. Thanks for the poem its really good. |
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Kyle_R Junior Member
since 1999-08-23
Posts 12Honolulu, HI, USA |
how heartbreaking. is this a true experience of yours Elizabeth? if so i am sorry for the loss you speak of. very powerful poetry, content and diction are key. her (the she you speak of) emotions rub off on the reader very distinctly. |
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snacks Junior Member
since 1999-08-21
Posts 35NJ |
THIS IS A REALLY TOUCHING "REAL PERSON" POEM THAT SPEAKS TO THE LOSS SO MANY PEOPLE DEAL WITH WHEN SOMEONE COMPLETES A SUICIDE. THERE IS OFTEN SUCH REGRET BY LOVED ONES AND FRIENDS THAT THEY DID NOT "DO SOMETHING" TO HELP SOONER. I SEE PEOPLE EVERY DAY (WHERE I WORK) WHO ARE LIVING WITH THIS KIND OF SECRET DESAIR. AND IT IS SO TRUE THAT PEOPLE'S EXPECTATIONS OF "DEPRESSED" DO NOT DO JUSTICE TO THE REALITY OF SO MANY WHO HIDE BEHIND MASKS..A GREAT POEM. I AM ALSO INTERESTED IN KNOWING IF YOU EXPERIENCED THIS LOSS PERSONALLY. ------------------ God is seen always in a child's eyes |
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snacks Junior Member
since 1999-08-21
Posts 35NJ |
THIS IS A REALLY TOUCHING "REAL PERSON" POEM THAT SPEAKS TO THE LOSS SO MANY PEOPLE DEAL WITH WHEN SOMEONE COMPLETES A SUICIDE. THERE IS OFTEN SUCH REGRET BY LOVED ONES AND FRIENDS THAT THEY DID NOT "DO SOMETHING" TO HELP SOONER. I SEE PEOPLE EVERY DAY (WHERE I WORK) WHO ARE LIVING WITH THIS KIND OF SECRET DESAIR. AND IT IS SO TRUE THAT PEOPLE'S EXPECTATIONS OF "DEPRESSED" DO NOT DO JUSTICE TO THE REALITY OF SO MANY WHO HIDE BEHIND MASKS..A GREAT POEM. I AM ALSO INTERESTED IN KNOWING IF YOU EXPERIENCED THIS LOSS PERSONALLY. ------------------ God is seen always in a child's eyes |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Nicely done |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Thank you all for replying to my poem. This one really means a lot to me. Snacks-Thank you for what you said. My friend in fact did not commit suicide, but she did die very suddenly. She was a victim of depression and had in fact attemted suicide, but did not die that way. She died in a car accident about two years ago. When she died, supposedly things in her life were wonderful, but now I do not believe so, and this poem is how I expressed it. Thank you all again! ------------------ *Elizabeth* "Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low, But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..." |
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traveler Member
since 1999-08-17
Posts 119 |
Elizabeth, I found found this very touching. The third stanza was my favorite. So well done ... Thank you |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sorry I did not respond right away, Elizabeth, as this was a hard thing to respond to. You see, my daughter is manic-depressive, and you described her situation quite well. As she has run off, leaving a child behind, and we do not know her whereabouts, or if she is OK, then I don't know if your fourth stanza fits her life or not. Thank you for letting me share this with you. ------------------ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Its truly beautiful Elizabeth, and not only expresses your love and caring for your friend, but sends a message to any of us to look a little deeper into the hearts of those we "think" we know well. All may not be fine on the inside. My sympathy for the loss of your friend. And Sunshine...may your daughter find her way home. I, too have a close relative who is bi-polar. A tough thing on the entire family. I'll be thinking of you. ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Thank you so much everyone. Sunshine, I'm glad to share my poetry, and I am always willing to let others share back with me. I truly hope your daughter is all right. You know, after reading that, I was reminded of another friend of mine who is bipolar. We knew each other for months before I even began to suspect, and I wasn't even thinking of that when I wrote this poem, but his story also fits. ------------------ *Elizabeth* "Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low, But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..." |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Today is the second anniversary of her death. ------------------ *Elizabeth* "Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low, But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..." |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Elizabeth A close friend of mine was like that, few weeks before we were really laughing about something, then one night she rang and I was too busy..:-((..it rang again later, but this time too late but I was with her for her last moment, but never again will I be too late for anyone, I promised myself that..Lovely tribute to your friend..:-)) HUGS ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Elizabeth, this is truly sad, I'm sorry for your loss. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Dark Angel and RainbowGirl-thank you both for your replies. RainbowGirl, I am so sorry abuot your friend, but I'm glad you got to have that last moment with her...  By the way, the line in my signature is from a song that reminds me of her.------------------ *Elizabeth* "Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low, But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..." |
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