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Star Fairy
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since 1999-08-11
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cerritos, ca, usa

0 posted 1999-08-29 05:50 PM


It was to last forever, but only in my mind it will last that long
and so I had to let go, and sing another sad love song
But even that took too much strength
and there's nobody to reach for in arm's length
So I live for myself, because I'm too scared to care again
Because everytime I start to care, I hurt again
So maybe I was destined to be by myself forever
Because everytime I've tried, I've failed every endeavor
It's sad to say I'm completely done with love
Because I'm young, and they say I've just begun
But I don't believe I'm strong enough to go through this again
Because I was so close to ending it all, and I might try that again
But I don't want to do that, even if it is my last hope
Because God gave me this life, so I have to learn to cope
But I've hurt him real bad, and I hurt myself more
So how am I supposed to be good, and what am I here for?
It feels as if I'll never run out of tears
But that's fine because they physically represent my fears
And each time one runs down my cheek and out of my eyes
I know i just let go of one more fear, and one more cry
I wish I was strong enough to get through without crying
but I also wish I had him back, because without him I'm dying
But everyone knows to be careful what they wish for
Because they don't always come true, and if they do, they contain more
More than what you wished for, maybe more bad than good
Because God works in mysterious ways, and thinks about you more than you would
And more times than once He's helped me get through
and He's always been there, more than I can say for my "crew"
So maybe these situations are for the best
And maybe I'll come out stronger than the rest.
So maybe I should strengthen my hope
And be Strong, at least strong enough to cope
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[This message has been edited by Star Fairy (edited 08-29-99).]

[This message has been edited by Star Fairy (edited 08-31-99).]

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Alicat
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since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094
Coastal Texas
1 posted 1999-08-29 06:06 PM


Very sad, longing, and self-angst ridden; but with a grain, a glimmer of hope towards the end. Most of us have felt like this at times, except for those few lucky bastards who have been happy, loved, and lacking naught since they first teethed on their silver suckle...but I digress.

As for a title...if nothing came to mind and nothing seems to work, use part of the first line. "It was to last forever..."


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Elizabeth
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2 posted 1999-08-29 09:10 PM


How about something like "A Prayer for Strength", or maybe "The Answer to a Prayer"? Both of those came to mind as I read this, because it seemed like you were looking for your strength and realized you had it in God.
By the way, it's nice to have you here, Star Fairy. I could feel this piece and recognized the feeling well. Great job.

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."


Star Fairy
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since 1999-08-11
Posts 39
cerritos, ca, usa
3 posted 1999-08-30 08:52 PM


thank you very much...
and I like your idea of A Prayer for Strength for the title..
and I'd like to bring this back up for more feedback...

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Star Fairy
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since 1999-08-11
Posts 39
cerritos, ca, usa
4 posted 1999-08-31 08:53 PM


feedback??

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Star Fairy
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since 1999-08-11
Posts 39
cerritos, ca, usa
5 posted 1999-08-31 09:56 PM


ok one last try.. and then it will be buriedd....

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PhaerieChild
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since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787
Aloha, Oregon
6 posted 1999-09-01 12:06 PM


You know the old adage "What doesn't kill you makes you stronger"? You seem very strong in your spiritual will and I know that He will continue to lift you up. As for a title that only thing that comes to mind is "Lord Grant Me Hope To Cope"

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Words lay dormant in the recesses of the mind til called forth to a labor of love. By WildChild


PhaerieChild
Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787
Aloha, Oregon
7 posted 1999-09-01 12:07 PM


You know the old adage "What doesn't kill you makes you stronger"? You seem very strong in your spiritual will and I know that He will continue to lift you up. As for a title that only thing that comes to mind is "Lord Grant Me Hope To Cope"

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Words lay dormant in the recesses of the mind til called forth to a labor of love. By WildChild


PhaerieChild
Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787
Aloha, Oregon
8 posted 1999-09-01 12:09 PM


You know the old adage "What doesn't kill you makes you stronger"? You seem very strong in your spiritual will and I know that He will continue to lift you up. As for a title that only thing that comes to mind is "Lord Grant Me Hope To Cope"

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Words lay dormant in the recesses of the mind til called forth to a labor of love. By WildChild


PhaerieChild
Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787
Aloha, Oregon
9 posted 1999-09-01 12:09 PM


You know the old adage "What doesn't kill you makes you stronger"? You seem very strong in your spiritual will and I know that He will continue to lift you up. As for a title that only thing that comes to mind is "Lord Grant Me Hope To Cope"

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Words lay dormant in the recesses of the mind til called forth to a labor of love. By WildChild


PhaerieChild
Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787
Aloha, Oregon
10 posted 1999-09-01 12:10 PM


You know the old adage "What doesn't kill you makes you stronger"? You seem very strong in your spiritual will and I know that He will continue to lift you up. As for a title that only thing that comes to mind is "Lord Grant Me Hope To Cope"

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Words lay dormant in the recesses of the mind til called forth to a labor of love. By WildChild


PhaerieChild
Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787
Aloha, Oregon
11 posted 1999-09-01 12:12 PM


You know the old adage "What doesn't kill you makes you stronger"? You seem very strong in your spiritual will and I know that He will continue to lift you up. As for a title that only thing that comes to mind is "Lord Grant Me Hope To Cope"

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Words lay dormant in the recesses of the mind til called forth to a labor of love. By WildChild


PhaerieChild
Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787
Aloha, Oregon
12 posted 1999-09-01 12:15 PM


You know the old adage "What doesn't kill you makes you stronger"? You seem very strong in your spiritual will and I know that He will continue to lift you up. As for a title that only thing that comes to mind is "Lord Grant Me Hope To Cope"

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Words lay dormant in the recesses of the mind til called forth to a labor of love. By WildChild


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