Open Poetry #1 |
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Shades of Gray |
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Denise
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What made the color fade away Replacing it with shades of gray; What dashed the dreams that were so dear; What made the magic disappear? What caused the symphony to cease; What led to harmony's decrease; What orchestrated disarray; What made the music go away? What stole the lightness from the heart; What made the laughter there depart; What stole the love of life away; What made the passion there decay? What caused the death of hopefulness Replacing it with nothingness; What stole the sparkle from the eyes; What caused the optimist's demise? What dashed the dreams that were so dear; What made the magic...disappear? [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 08-29-99).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
dsnyder, Another beauty you rank high on my list, just keep them comming. |
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Denise
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Thanks again Seymour. I'll keep them coming as long as I can get on the web. Intermittent systems problems are driving me nuts! Once I get online, I'm afraid to sign off! Thanks again for reading and commenting! ------------------ Denise |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Very good! I like this one immensely! I enjoy reading your work! ![]() |
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Denise
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Why thank you Poet deVine. I enjoy yours and several others as well. I wish there were more hours in the day to read and comment on all of them! Thanks again. I'm going to try to do that smiley face and hope it works! ![]() ------------------ Denise |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Another great poem! I must say you are a talented one, glad to have you here! Look forward to more of your work! |
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once Junior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 16 |
I really enjoyed this, although it was sad. I hate when something wonderful ends ![]() |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is the first of yours I have read and it is superb! The construction is first rate and the words expertly chosen. I will certainly look for you in the future. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Well done, I truly enjoyed this one. Michael |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Yet another good'n.... ![]() |
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Emmy Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 194KY |
WOW, you've really got this rhyming and schematics thing down pat! Maybe you could teach me a thing or two! Wonderful! I loved it! |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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Thank you, WhtDove, once, Balladeer, Michael,Nan and Emmy. I'm glad that something that I so enjoy doing is enjoyed by others! ![]() ------------------ Denise |
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Elizabeth![]() ![]()
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
*Sigh* I still don't know what makes things change. Nicely written, d. ------------------ *Elizabeth* "Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low, But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..." |
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Denise
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Thank you Elizabeth. I'm glad you enjoyed it. ![]() ------------------ Denise |
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Denise
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Thank you Elizabeth. I'm glad you enjoyed it! ![]() ------------------ Denise |
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Kelly Member
since 1999-07-03
Posts 145 |
Great job! Looking forward to reading more of you work. Thanks. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
don't we all wonder at times? |
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