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The Bouquet
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The Bouquet |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648
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Quite carefully he chose the bunch -he purchased them - instead of lunch White baby's breath, red roses too -the best they had - perfection true. The fragrant blooms remind him so Of her sweet love - the best he'll know His loving bride, best friend so dear His cherished one - it is quite clear. A token small - but from the heart For all she's done - it's but the start Of many blooms still yet to be From now and through eternity. Now after work he hurries fast -recalling times that long are past -bouquets of yore - he ever gave Then lays them down - upon her grave. ...Bouquets of love shall ever be Presented there - eternally. |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Wonderful....it brings to mind Joe DiMaggio putting fresh flowers at Marilyn Monroe's resting place...every week, without fail until he himself was gone. Good poem. I like your work  ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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Thank you caroline. That's exactly what it reminded me of after I read it too. I didn't have them in mind though when I was writing it. Thanks again! |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
I didn't expect it to end like this! I thought he was hurrying home to give her a bouquet for their anniversary, or something. How very sad and touching. ------------------ *Elizabeth* "Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low, But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..." |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
wonderful and with such a sad and surprising ending...I am looking forward to reading more of your work ------------------ Shannon |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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Thank you Elizabeth. I was going for a surprise ending! Blame it on the Sixth Sense! (The best surprise ending EVER!) Well, it's getting quite late and though I dread signing off (I may not be able to get back online for another week!) If not I hope it's because the computer died again and not me! Although I'd love to stay the course, my hubby's hinting at divorce!! (just kidding!) |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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Thank you too, Shannon, I'm glad you enjoyed it too! |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Very well done - and with an intresting twist for a finale - Nice one, ds... |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thank you Nan. I guess it had the effect I was going for! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
dsnyder, A sorry twist, but beautiful poem. |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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Thank you Seymour. I'm glad you liked it. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
I loved that unexpected twist at the end! It was sad though, but not at all what I expected! Great work! |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Darn! Another one I wish I had written! Very, very nice. |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thank you kindly, WhtDove and Balladeer for taking the time to read and comment. ------------------ Denise |
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