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RainbowGirl
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since 1999-07-31
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0 posted 1999-08-28 07:25 PM


I want you
but you're not here
I need you
but you're not near
I see you
in every single place
in every private thought
that I have ever shared
you're with your family now
and that is where you'll stay
but with all my love
I'll wish you
a rainbow
to brighten every day....


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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.


[This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 08-28-99).]

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WhtDove
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1 posted 1999-08-28 11:12 PM


This was so sweet! A rainbow to brighten every day...awe! Loved readin it!
Alwye
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In the space between moments
2 posted 1999-08-28 11:18 PM


Whtdove is right, very sweet!!! Lovely!

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*Krista Knutson*

I see the world through the loving eyes of my heart, and suffer the pain of unfulfilled visions. -- Daniel L. Miller



Pepper
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since 1999-08-19
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3 posted 1999-08-29 03:45 PM


yes...it is lovely
Robin
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since 1999-08-07
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4 posted 1999-08-29 04:28 PM


Yes, I like this too. You can really feel the desperation and confusion. And to finish it with such a positive thought is excellent.

Robin

writer51
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since 1999-08-29
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5 posted 1999-08-29 04:34 PM


I liked the passion and force that was evident when reading this well written poem.
Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
6 posted 1999-08-29 04:49 PM


Excellent! I like the poem and have been in this situation unfortunately.

RainbowGirl
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7 posted 1999-08-29 06:12 PM


Thanks all..:-)) Memory lane ...*sigh*

HUGS

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.



moonmoon
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since 1999-08-13
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8 posted 1999-08-29 06:24 PM



Sweet & touchy Rainbow...Loved it..

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"No one was ever ruined from without;
The final ruin comes from within.".....Amelia E. Barr



Balladeer
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9 posted 1999-08-29 07:06 PM


Living up to your name awesomely!
Talon
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since 1999-08-25
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Los Angeles
10 posted 1999-08-29 07:27 PM


Hits home

Nice poem, RainbowGirl, and it's nice to see the rainbow in it

RainbowGirl
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11 posted 1999-08-29 07:50 PM


Thank you...he'll never know though, just as he'll never know the little black dress was written for him...but loving someone is such a miracle that even when shrouded in sadness I smile at the beauty of something so magical that touches me so deeply yet so quietly...

HUGS all


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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.


[This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 08-30-99).]

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