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Mile High Manilow |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA 
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It was a hot day, that day. Typical for this part of the country in late August. This day, this momentus day, waking to the sun brought numbness and fear of thought. At 11 a.m. I went to the door, called goodbye to my father and walked out to the street. Mom was there, my ride today, we spoke little as we drove just about writing, calling and such. At the bus depot I got out, a quick hug, a kiss goodbye and I boarded the bus of life. I didn't watch her as I left I wanted to start my life Army life, adult life, my life. From bus to plane in blurry haste, orders in hand, and still clueless taking off for parts as yet unknown. Sipping soda at flying speed, staring out of the airplane window as my country slides below me. Manilow sings to my departure in sweet sad voice on two dollar earphones a mile high sonnet for my tears. ------------------ Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. JP |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
A lovely piece of you. Good one JP. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Geesh, JP - Everything is a poem to you - and always a darned good one too...  |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
a comfort to me in my own ride of life, JP. thank you. ------------------ "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." -Charles Brugnot |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
That last stanza is worth the price of admission to anywhere! Excellent, excellent work. |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
I enjoyed... very good. |
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once Junior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 16 |
I was expecting something much much different! What a wonderful surprise! Reminded me of my 'first'parental goodbye... Excellent! |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
Honestly I am floored by the comments! I almost cried but then I realized I didn't have the time to write down the feelings to put in another poem so I stopped. Thank you for your kind remarks, they are truly welcome.  ------------------ Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. JP |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Another good one JP. |
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