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Phoenix Rising |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
His newborn cry is his father's lament. The fire in his violet eye flashes. With burning wings, he begins his ascent. His newborn cry is his father's lament. He touches mother earth only to die. With burning wings, he begins his ascent. Sky-dancer he is, born to soar and fly. He touches mother earth only to die. His rebirth marks the end of each Age. Sky-dancer he is, born to soar and fly. Phoenix lives the extremes of love and rage. His rebirth marks the end of each Age. Each new Age is born of cataclysm. Phoenix lives the extremes of love and rage. Death is the price of such altruism. Each new Age is born of cataclysm. The price paid is God's blood and Man's despair. Death is the price of such altruism. His grief is why Phoenix keeps to the air. The price paid is God's blood and Man's despair. Peace and brotherhood are bought at high cost. His grief is why Phoenix keeps to the air. With his birth he mourns what mankind has lost. Peace and brotherhood are bought at high cost. When Phoenix' heart breaks he will immolate. With his birth he mourns what mankind has lost. With his death Phoenix will wipe clean the slate. When Phoenix' heart breaks he will immolate. Broken dreams and hearts comprise his fire. With his death Phoenix will wipe clean the slate. Desire ignites his funeral pyre. Broken dreams and hearts comprise his fire. The fire in his violet eye flashes. Desire ignites his funeral pyre. Phoenix rises from his sire's ashes. ©1999 DreamEvil ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Dreamie Man! This was great pantoum! I enjoyed every line. |
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Gentle Soul Member
since 1999-07-12
Posts 273Vinton,Ohio USA |
I love it.. well writen.. its good brother! ------------------ Gënt£ë¤§°û£ |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I stand in awe of your talent for this type of poem. Excellent imagery paints a wonderful picture. Makes me want to take my paltry attempts at rhyming and slink off into the sunset! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
You have certainly found your niche. We're going to need to start a Pantoum Room just to display your poetry. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Thank you much my friends.  |
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Dragoness Senior Member
since 1999-08-07
Posts 513 |
One of your better ones.Loved it! ------------------ Set you heart free and your mind will follow. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Fantastic !!! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
You are so good at these! Free verse Severn is in envy. Beautiful imagery, lovely words. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Quite a splendid job Dream! |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
excellent------------------ "Grief can take care of itself, but to get the full value of joy you must have somebody to divide it with." *Mark Twain* |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Well, DreamEvil, I don't know how this one got by me the first time through. This is an awesome work. You never fail to impress me. Michael |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is perhaps my favorite of your pantoums.. I like it lots... |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Well now, high praise indeed for this piece. Thank you all. Nan, Michael, means much to me. |
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