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Poet deVine
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0 posted 1999-08-25 09:27 PM




She lay alone amid the tangle
the girl with the misty eyes
broken in body, a lifeless spirit
‘the passenger always dies’

Pulled along just for a ride
she sat in front next to Ned
six teens out for a little fun
now five of them lay dead

A soft drizzle begins to fall
flashing red lights draw near
reflections of life still remain
in that one crystal tear

Life, so fragile, ebbs away
no one can stop it’s flow
rain glistens in misty eyes
that held a young girl’s glow

© Copyright 1999 Poet deVine - All Rights Reserved
caroline
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1 posted 1999-08-25 09:31 PM


This is so haunting...an excellent poem, sad though it is.

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...

WhtDove
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2 posted 1999-08-25 10:59 PM


This was a sad one! Well written.
Alwye
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3 posted 1999-08-26 12:34 PM


So very sad...exquisitely written, Miss deVine..I'm left in awe of your talent.

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*Krista Knutson*

I see the world through the loving eyes of my heart, and suffer the pain of unfulfilled visions. -- Daniel L. Miller



Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
4 posted 1999-08-26 12:53 PM


Haunting melody here... chills!

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Everyone has a photographic memory...
...most of us just don't have film!

Dark Angel
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5 posted 1999-08-26 03:12 AM


Poet, this poem is excellent. so very sad. I always look forward to reading your works
Dragoness
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6 posted 1999-08-26 04:00 AM


Hauntly beautiful.

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Set you heart free and your mind will follow.

Michael
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7 posted 1999-08-26 04:16 AM


Excellent as always Ms. DeVine.

Michael

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8 posted 1999-08-26 11:48 AM


You did an excellent job with this one. I'd like to see it in the newsletter for MADD...I think it would be perfect. Sad, but so hauntingly true.
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9 posted 1999-08-26 12:20 PM


Well done!!!
Craig
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10 posted 1999-08-26 12:48 PM


Well Miss deVine seems like you’ve gone and done it again, every time we swap challenges it always seems to be you that produces the best work. Another excellent response to a challenge. (let me know when you start giving lessons)
Mona Lisa
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11 posted 1999-08-26 01:05 PM


A beautiful account of the fragility of life.
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12 posted 1999-08-26 01:11 PM


Nothing much to say but "Wow"-so sad.

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."

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