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True Sound of Silence
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True Sound of Silence |
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Ladycat 
since 1999-07-05
Posts 782At the edge and a doorway,TX 
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Silent pictures Painted on silent walls Silent people Down silent halls Silent thoughts Silent dreams Silent sunlight Cast silent raybeams Silent life We silently live Silent kisses We silently give Silent hearts Silent minds Silent guys Who are silent and blind Silence comes Silence goes I breath the silence Through my nose Silent room Silent me Silence here To always be Love, Lady I couldn't tell you how this came to my mind.. Look everyone.. It rhymes.. ------------------ Live in my world just once and you'll find yourself enraptured. |
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skysight Junior Member
since 1999-08-14
Posts 22 |
Behold my silent reply: I like how you emphasize various things in daily life, but you don't seem to elaborate on them much. Still, the message is yours and yours alone, and the only opinion that truly matters is yours. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
'Tis a true delight to find you once more in these pages of verse. Well done my dear. ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Shhhhhhhh..... |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Simply lovely! Such a purity of thought here! I loved this! You don't need to elaborate on anything! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
You did just fine, Ladycat. Silent but deadly |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Simon and Garfunkel have nothing on you. The pain that you put forth in this hit me solidly in the chest. Welldone. ------------------ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Mona Lisa Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 100Halifax, Nova Scotia |
I like this. It makes you think of something we dont tend to think of and that is silence. I especially like the line, "I breathe silence through my nose" Don't ask me why, but that line stuck with me. Seeing as breathing is so vital to our existence, but yet seems so silent and insignificant sometimes. Thank you for making me think. |
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Ladycat
since 1999-07-05
Posts 782At the edge and a doorway,TX |
Thank you all.. I have learned that writing on the fly works wonders.. I'm glad that all of you liked the piece so much.. I never expected for anyone to like it.. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
it doth rhyme and has alotto merit i like the use you put into the word silent was very clever |
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