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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Commitment A tongue strikes an inner shell. The ring cries, a double swell. The pressures of circles ply, To infinity they fly. Vibrations we think as frail, Forever and ever sail. Nirvana within the core, Touches and tastes every shore. Tortures of a sensuous gale, Lays the pride besides the trail. Doubt makes for stormy waters. Apocalypse, has no quarters. Garrotted by thoughts of dread, Promise of the chalice bled. Holy vows and the oaths swore, Toast of hemlocks, evermore. She, the tongue that struck the bell, And I, the wrung and tolling shell. |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
I like the passion I see in this verse. Where the two become on in the reverberation. It reminds me of certain pieces of music that also strike a resonate chord in me. Nicely done. INclan |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
INclan, Writing it was fun. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
WOW |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
another brilliant read. Thank you...You are a favorite of mine here and a real inspiration to me. ------------------ Shannon |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Severn, What can be better then a WOW. Thank you so much for the read and comment. |
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traveler Member
since 1999-08-17
Posts 119 |
Another work of greatness ... the third stanza in particular ... "... Apocalypse, has no quarter" ... Thank you again ... [This message has been edited by traveler (edited 08-26-99).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
WOW...very well written. I really enjoyed it |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Travler and Hoot, My thanks again I appreciate your time and trouble to read and comment on my poems. |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
I enjoyed this one a great deal. I love the way you weave your words. I can see different pictures, each time I read it. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Rosemary, And an extra thank you to you. Sweet Rosemary. |
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moonmoon Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277TX , USA |
Seymour, as always, a great piece..  Thanks for sharing it with us..Enjoyed the read..------------------ "No one was ever ruined from without; The final ruin comes from within.".....Amelia E. Barr |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Sy, I think you have found a home....and rightfully so. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer and moonmon, A friend in need is a friend indeed. Thank you so much for the comments. |
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IsabelleSkye Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 253 |
Rhyming poetry usually doesn't strike me as much as yours does. Wonderful! Just Wonderful! Izzy ------------------ God is really only another artist. He invented the giraffe, the elephant and the cat. He has no real style, He just goes on trying other things. - Pablo Picasso |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lizzy, Your praise is making me dizzy |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Dear Pepper, Mike was right it was an over sight. I look forward to all the comments. And your was the nicest. I checked my mail and did recieve an Email from you but I did not connect Lois with Pepper. I did not mean to neglict you It's not in my character. I will look forward to all your comments and you will get an answer. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Words of power, that command respect and regret. |
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