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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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I stood there on the quiet street, My brand new house in front of me. It would be everything I'd need, The architect said happily. I seemed to notice evidence As minutes drifted slowly by That there were things that made no sense; Some features seemed to be awry. I know that I'm no builder, but In my mind it does surely seem That, for a house to stand for long, It needs to have some well-placed beams. I asked to see the blueprints but The architect had none to show. He said emotion was his guide And did construction with a "flow". I then asked for him to explain Its structural integrity. He smiled a smile of merriment And did his best to humor me. He explained to me in quiet voice That one reserves to humor fools That, when emotions lead the way, There is no need to follow rules. The heart, he said, must be the guide. One's passions as the guiding force. Emotions serving as the base, Imagination as the source. As I peeked inside, I could see The living room was barely there, Some walls were no more than half done, The spiral staircase led nowhere. The tiles had only been half-laid; The porcelain sinks already chipped, Door handles wouldn't turn at all, The shower had a leak that dripped. I hung my head and walked away. I didn't even turn around When, with the next breath of fresh air, My brand new house came tumbling down. So now, with my dreams fallen down And with my home completely wrecked I vow to never hire again A poet for an architect. |
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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN |
I have lots and lots of houses like that! Some have only basements, some only have attics, but they all have a front porch with a view. ------------------ Kay-lynn **A dream is a wish your heart makes :) |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
A point well taken. Enjoyed the read. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
You know, I'm a drafter, and working for an architect, I see some similarities to this and work! WD! Bal!  ------------------ Everyone has a photographic memory... ...most of us just don't have film! |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Hey pal?...Why don't ya let me and LongJohn build one for ya?...Just think of the possibilities?....Hell, it may not make Southern Living magazine, but it may be profiled on Riply's Believe It or Not? |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Great poem! But you might want to pass on Toe's offer... can you imagine the "possibilities" they could come up with for your living... ahem.. pleasures? LOL. Seriously, 'Deer... I saw this one coming... as I proceeded through every verse, I thought... that's my poetry!!! LOL. Half-baked, a thought here, another there... with the most tenous of connections. |
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Blondie Member
since 1999-08-06
Posts 307Ohio |
Very creative and enjoyable to read. Love the last verse |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Great point! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Balladeer....I think that might be a good idea...but I think that must have been the same architect that built the Winchester Mystery House, and people pay big bucks to go see that |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
In my poetry that's all a tumble I give my opinion here most humble Tis better to live in a house with heart than in a house built architect smart Walls may be straight, doors open wide but what of the heart that dwells inside built with love any house can be the perfect setting for my poetry! I enjoyed your poem, Balladeer! Another good one!  |
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Poetwheel Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 208Canada |
Sounds like recalling a memory...building a house? PW ------------------ Poetic Wheelbarrow http://www.stormloader.com/poetwheel/den.html ICQ: 44370408 |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
DeVine one, any little joint Can serve you well. That's not the point. Why settle for only one when you, With little effort, can have the two? Your poem can be constructed well And still convey the thoughts you tell. Please always write straight from the heart Just plan it out before you start. A structured house that has no soul Should not be any poet's goal But one with no base, only heart Will, within minutes, fall apart. Combine the two things, if you can Write from the heart but with a plan And you may be amazed to see How good a poet you can be. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
For a poet to build a house for me he'd have to look into my heart and see that there's no room for any neglect but plenty of rooms for loving, by heck! ------------------ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
..well, I'd like a house for each season... one in the mountains for the fall foliage ..and one by the ocean in the spring, and one by the ocean in the summer, and one by the ocean in the winter...someplace warm please??? |
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