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Incognito Love
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Incognito Love |
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jfreak Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306Yuma, AZ, USA 
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Dusk after Dusk Through that rusted gate Crawled a heartsick love He knew only one passion. She was his life, breath, heart. His pure white, ivory, dove. A mere bench in a forgotten garden Was the point of their rendezvous to which these two love's hearts collided Sweet nothings whispered in the dew Eyes and ears absorbing every detail Two Souls in which everything was confided He was her dream, reality, hope Her every wish come true A gentle gatekeeper of the treasure of her soul She longed for him He longed for her Two halves that made a whole A secret love, there is no sweeter No tender and fulfilling love than the one that is incognito which shows all the lengths and depths, the mountains climbed and oceans swum The test of the true love between A fair lady and an honorable fellow. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
jfreak - I take a day or two to do some personal stuff - and you try to sneak this lovely gem by me - You can't escape my discerning eye that easily - I like this one -  ------------------ Nay, if our wits run the Wild-Goose chase, I am done: For thou hast more of the Wild-Goose in one of thy wits, Than I am sure I have in my whole five. ~ ²1592 Wm. Shakespeare ~ Romeo & Juliet ~ ii. iv. 75 |
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jfreak Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306Yuma, AZ, USA |
Again, inspired by the timeless classic, Les Miserables. This is about Cosette and Marius. I just wanted to write something about them. In my opinion one of the greatest couples in classic literature. Right next to Romeo and Juliet if not beyond them. That is just my opinion though. Thanks for your words. Jfreak |
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IsabelleSkye Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 253 |
I have been neglecting you my dear friend. This was lovely, and your painting with words has come a long ways since last year. *Beaming Proudly* Beautiful, just beautiful Izzy ------------------ God is really only another artist. He invented the giraffe, the elephant and the cat. He has no real style, He just goes on trying other things. - Pablo Picasso |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
jfreak, You freaked me out. A wondrful poem |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
*round of applause* THAT there poem was jaw-dropping stuff *8) It's... It's.... ok, he says as he thinks how to describe this poem.... It's wonderful! A subject close to my own heart handled very delicately. Nice *8) ------------------ I believe in fairy tales but then I'm just a silly romantic, what do I know? |
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jfreak Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306Yuma, AZ, USA |
Thank you all for your inspiring words. Izzy what are you talking about, "I've come so far since last year"? What is that about? I just ask b/c I don't recall getting any critical critques from you. But Thanks anyway. I hope I have grown. I was getting a little discouraged with this one b/c I took several days before anyone commented and I thought that I had done really well with this poem. I guess patience is a virtue though. Again thank you all for your kind words. Jreak |
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IsabelleSkye Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 253 |
*sigh* you don't know me???? I guess it's cuz the halo is gone! Think...another time, another place, your SIS???? huh! shows how much I mean LOL Luv Your X friend *wink* *nudge* ------------------ God is really only another artist. He invented the giraffe, the elephant and the cat. He has no real style, He just goes on trying other things. - Pablo Picasso |
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jfreak Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306Yuma, AZ, USA |
Hey there my angel, How dare you change your name on me. Then not reveal to me your secret identity. You know I love your stuff. Well I will definately be looking for you more. I was wondering why I hadn't seen you on here. Now I know. I was like, I guess she didn't defect with the rest of us. But now the mystery is complete and I know what you mean by the growth now. You knew my work when I was first really branching out. The compliment is even greater now. Thank you. jfreak |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Beautiful! "gatekeeper of the treasure of her soul"..great phrase! This definitely is romantic.  |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
An extreamly romantic poetic piece you've done here. I really enjoyed it, thanks so much for sharing. ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald |
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