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Krystal
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since 1999-06-19
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Shelton,WA USA

0 posted 1999-06-22 05:26 AM


"Everything's fine," she says,
The woman with the plastic smile,
Even though he just ripped out
The only telephone she could dial.

It doesn't matter anyway,
The police have been called before;
And when they left, her world shattered
With just the slamming of the door.

Now she's huddled, spirits broken,
In the darkest corner of her mind,
The only place he cannot reach--
It's the only place he cannot find.

The bruises are fading,
But her loved ones still ask;
"Everything's fine," she says,
The woman wearing the mask.

People whisper in accusatory tones,
"Why doesn't she just go?"
But the answer to that question
Even she strives to know.

With every sunrise
Dawns another awakening fear:
Of staying, of leaving,
Of losing all that she holds dear.

Until one day, it was just too late.

He didn't mean to take it so far;
And after her death was his trial;
Yet beneath the daffodils this woman lay,
The woman with the plastic smile.

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Shannon D. Montgomery
("Krystal")

© Copyright 1999 Krystal - All Rights Reserved
Balladeer
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1 posted 1999-06-22 10:29 PM


Goosebumps run rampant. So sad.....so accurate. Well done.
Sally S.
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since 1999-06-07
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2 posted 1999-06-23 01:21 AM


Whew, this poem was very powerful and very moving. Such a tragic tale....and yet all to real for some.
Ixtab
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3 posted 1999-06-23 02:40 AM


Tragic, yet a superb ending, what better way to free ourselves from plastic smiles than death?
Krystal
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4 posted 1999-06-23 02:42 AM


Balladeer... thanks ever so much for commenting. I'm glad you liked it. :-)

Sally... Thanks for reading and commenting! Yes, you are right, all too real for some...
I appreciate your comments.

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Shannon D. Montgomery
("Krystal")

Krystal
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since 1999-06-19
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5 posted 1999-06-23 02:43 AM


Ixtab...
Thank you for reading and taking the time to respond... true, I never thought of that, actually. Your insight is appreciated!

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Shannon D. Montgomery
("Krystal")

#5 PS
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since 1999-06-21
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6 posted 1999-06-23 12:37 PM


Whoa...
elvira
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since 1999-07-06
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7 posted 1999-07-22 04:47 PM


how sad, but oh so true, it gave me shivers

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one night at the airport...Childhood Memories...eight short weeks...your countenance...just watching tv...hoarse whispers...My One and Only...Tribute to M.J....Feel the need?...serving wench...the mistress...stolen hours...devotion...Master...apart

thursdayschild
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since 1999-07-01
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8 posted 1999-07-22 05:02 PM


very emotional poem, revealing a serious
topic. Krystal, hope you don't mind me leaving this under your poem, but anyone
facing this situation, there is help:
National Domestic Violence Hotline
1-800-799-SAFE (7233)
Thanks for sharing this......

Andrew Scott
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since 1999-06-24
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Redlands,CA,USA
9 posted 1999-07-22 05:09 PM


You write with the clarity of truth. I have to say I've noticed a great deal of poetry dedicated to this awful side of humanity and I find it unfortunate such great work must spring from such brutality. But, better that than the silence which so often accompanies abuse. I bow to you and your fine effort.
Sunshine
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10 posted 1999-07-22 05:56 PM


It's oft been said "truth hurts". It also kills.

You did justice to a matter severe with a fine piece of work.

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Sunshine
Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


INclan
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11 posted 1999-07-22 06:02 PM


I find this all too true which is in itself a regret. I hope this is not from personal experience.
Krystal
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since 1999-06-19
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Shelton,WA USA
12 posted 1999-07-22 06:05 PM


Thanks to everyone for your wonderful and inspirational comments! Thursday's Child...
No, I don't mind a bit...in fact, wonderful idea!! INClan... yes, most of my poetry comes from personal experience, but at least I'm fortunate enough to be able to write about it. Thank you for your comments!

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Shannon D. Montgomery
("Krystal")

aziza
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since 2006-07-09
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Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!
13 posted 2007-06-01 04:31 AM


Not only is this good -- it needs to be brought to the top some place.  Wow - it just says it all with such power.

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