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The Woman With The Plastic Smile
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The Woman With The Plastic Smile |
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Krystal Member
since 1999-06-19
Posts 140Shelton,WA USA |
"Everything's fine," she says, The woman with the plastic smile, Even though he just ripped out The only telephone she could dial. It doesn't matter anyway, The police have been called before; And when they left, her world shattered With just the slamming of the door. Now she's huddled, spirits broken, In the darkest corner of her mind, The only place he cannot reach-- It's the only place he cannot find. The bruises are fading, But her loved ones still ask; "Everything's fine," she says, The woman wearing the mask. People whisper in accusatory tones, "Why doesn't she just go?" But the answer to that question Even she strives to know. With every sunrise Dawns another awakening fear: Of staying, of leaving, Of losing all that she holds dear. Until one day, it was just too late. He didn't mean to take it so far; And after her death was his trial; Yet beneath the daffodils this woman lay, The woman with the plastic smile. ------------------ Shannon D. Montgomery ("Krystal") |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Goosebumps run rampant. So sad.....so accurate. Well done. |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
Whew, this poem was very powerful and very moving. Such a tragic tale....and yet all to real for some. |
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Ixtab Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 105MEXICAlpan de las tunas |
Tragic, yet a superb ending, what better way to free ourselves from plastic smiles than death? |
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Krystal Member
since 1999-06-19
Posts 140Shelton,WA USA |
Balladeer... thanks ever so much for commenting. I'm glad you liked it. :-) Sally... Thanks for reading and commenting! Yes, you are right, all too real for some... I appreciate your comments. ------------------ Shannon D. Montgomery ("Krystal") |
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Krystal Member
since 1999-06-19
Posts 140Shelton,WA USA |
Ixtab... Thank you for reading and taking the time to respond... true, I never thought of that, actually. Your insight is appreciated! ------------------ Shannon D. Montgomery ("Krystal") |
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#5 PS Junior Member
since 1999-06-21
Posts 19Ogden, Utah, USA |
Whoa... |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
how sad, but oh so true, it gave me shivers ------------------ one night at the airport...Childhood Memories...eight short weeks...your countenance...just watching tv...hoarse whispers...My One and Only...Tribute to M.J....Feel the need?...serving wench...the mistress...stolen hours...devotion...Master...apart |
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thursdayschild Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 169Houston, Tx. |
very emotional poem, revealing a serious topic. Krystal, hope you don't mind me leaving this under your poem, but anyone facing this situation, there is help: National Domestic Violence Hotline 1-800-799-SAFE (7233) Thanks for sharing this...... |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
You write with the clarity of truth. I have to say I've noticed a great deal of poetry dedicated to this awful side of humanity and I find it unfortunate such great work must spring from such brutality. But, better that than the silence which so often accompanies abuse. I bow to you and your fine effort. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
It's oft been said "truth hurts". It also kills. You did justice to a matter severe with a fine piece of work. ------------------ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
I find this all too true which is in itself a regret. I hope this is not from personal experience. |
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Krystal Member
since 1999-06-19
Posts 140Shelton,WA USA |
Thanks to everyone for your wonderful and inspirational comments! Thursday's Child... No, I don't mind a bit...in fact, wonderful idea!! INClan... yes, most of my poetry comes from personal experience, but at least I'm fortunate enough to be able to write about it. Thank you for your comments! ------------------ Shannon D. Montgomery ("Krystal") |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Not only is this good -- it needs to be brought to the top some place. Wow - it just says it all with such power. A |
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