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DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

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0 posted 1999-08-23 02:52 AM

Night is cold and lonely
Night is cold and lonely
Still the tempest does turn
Still the tempest does turn
Cold tempest is still night
and turn does the lonely.

Sparkles of ice glitter
Sparkles of ice glitter
Cloudy breath floats away
Cloudy breath floats away
Breath of cloudy sparkles
away ice breath glitter.

Winter brings it's caress
Winter brings it's caress
Delight rewards the soul
Delight rewards the soul
Winter rewards delight
it's soul brings the caress.

Winter glitter sparkles
and tempest floats away
it's cloudy soul does turn
the ice of lonely night
caress is the rewards
still breath brings cold delight.

©1999 DreamEvil

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Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings?
DreamEvil©

DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

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1 posted 1999-08-23 02:58 AM

Thanks again, Nan!

Gentle Soul
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since 1999-07-12

Posts 273
Vinton,Ohio USA

2 posted 1999-08-23 03:04 AM

THIS IS BEAUTIFUL.. I love it.. I can feel the cold air hittin me in the face now.. lol.. heheh.. you are a witty, intelligent, awesome poet.. keep it up brother!

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Gënt£ë¤§°û£

~one voice~
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since 1999-07-08

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Billings, MT USA

3 posted 1999-08-23 04:47 AM

Dream, I so much enjoy watching your fabulous work become more and more wonderful! Keep it up! I'm proud of you!

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~onevoice~

"She looked at her life
like lines, never-ending,
constantly forming,
reforming and bending."

LngJhnAg
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since 1999-07-23

Posts 3508
Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

4 posted 1999-08-23 08:10 AM

aha! A paradelle - I looked through previous submittals and couldn't find a one. If I may, I'd like to use this poem as an example for my daughter, Maggie.

Thanks

Nan

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since 1999-05-20

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Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

5 posted 1999-08-23 08:34 AM

Geesh..... give a guy a format - and he weaves a symphony with it....Very, very well done, indeed.....You ALMOST made me like winter, DE....

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Nay, if our wits run the Wild-Goose chase, I am done:
For thou hast more of the Wild-Goose in one of thy wits,
Than I am sure I have in my whole five.
~ ²1592 Wm. Shakespeare ~ Romeo & Juliet ~ ii. iv. 75

DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

6 posted 1999-08-23 08:55 AM

Thanks to all, especially Nan, the Lady who showed me a true challenge in this paradelle format.

Nan, twas quite a challenge you gave, though I'm humbled by your praise of the result. Thank you for such honors.

[This message has been edited by DreamEvil (edited 08-23-99).]

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

7 posted 1999-08-23 09:08 AM

Refer to my personal comment on ICq to this one Dream...well written

WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22

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Illinois

8 posted 1999-08-23 09:09 AM

Your talents are unending my friend! You mastered it, and brought it to life! Very well done!

Dragoness
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since 1999-08-07

Posts 513

9 posted 1999-08-23 10:45 AM

I love winter...come on snow!! Well done !

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Set you heart free and your mind will follow.

DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

10 posted 1999-08-23 10:21 PM

Thanks much, my fellow poets.

Poet deVine

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since 1999-05-26

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Hurricane Alley

11 posted 1999-08-24 08:03 AM

I thought the poem was wonderful! But why does anyone choose to write this way? Why is this a 'form'? Where did it come from? Would anyone write in nothing but paradelles?

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

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Tamarac Fla

12 posted 1999-08-24 08:30 AM

DreanEvil,
Not familar with the Paradelle but you seemed to have done a wonderful job.

Alwye

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since 1999-06-16

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In the space between moments

13 posted 1999-08-24 10:11 PM

Wonderfully done, Dream! You make me wish for a Minnesota winter..its creeping up awfully fast now..

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*Krista Knutson*

I see the world through the loving eyes of my heart, and suffer the pain of unfulfilled visions. -- Daniel L. Miller

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