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Kyle_R
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since 1999-08-23

Posts 12
Honolulu, HI, USA

0 posted 1999-08-23 12:15 PM

This is a sonnet I wrote a couple minutes ago. Please comment and tell me what it makes you think about...

"Horizon's Edge"

A reprise of lost gazes, idle thoughts,
flexed gently throughout flowing streams of light,
where upon endeavors of strangers sought
a place of timelessness to guild their might,
collective groves, common to all and none,
stretching souls as plaster upon oneself,
drinks worries and troubles into the sun,
pressed back tongues of greed to cascade love's wealth,
a celestial greeting of mind and heart,
praised solely for aesthetic existence,
revivals of aged life and nature's art,
found strangled by man's selfish resistence...

by Kyle K. Richardson

PS: yes, i am new to this forum so i don't really know anyone here or their critiquing styles but i am all for any remarks. don't hold back..

[This message has been edited by Kyle_R (edited 08-23-99).]

Kyle_R
Junior Member

since 1999-08-23

Posts 12
Honolulu, HI, USA

1 posted 1999-08-23 12:28 PM

anyone?

Alwye

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since 1999-06-16

Posts 3850
In the space between moments

2 posted 1999-08-23 12:38 PM

Very nice work, I enjoyed it!! Welcome to the family, I hope to see more from you!!

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*Krista Knutson*

I see the world through the loving eyes of my heart, and suffer the pain of unfulfilled visions. -- Daniel L. Miller

Kyle_R
Junior Member

since 1999-08-23

Posts 12
Honolulu, HI, USA

3 posted 1999-08-23 12:41 PM

thank you Alwye, i'm glad you enjoyed it (i'm rather new at poetry and this was pretty much my first sonnet, took me at least half an hour to write!). i plan to spend much more time here at the "passionate forums".

Poet deVine

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since 1999-05-26

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Hurricane Alley

4 posted 1999-08-23 02:25 AM

Welcome to the forum, Kyle. Your sonnet is quite worthy..your imagery is excellent! I look forward to reading more....

Kyle_R
Junior Member

since 1999-08-23

Posts 12
Honolulu, HI, USA

5 posted 1999-08-23 03:12 AM

thank you for the welcome, PdV, and all the same kindness to you as well.

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

6 posted 1999-08-23 09:19 AM

Nicely done Kyle...looking forward to more

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald

Elizabeth

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since 1999-06-07

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Minnesota

7 posted 1999-08-23 01:46 PM

Welcome, Kyle...

I like the imagery in your poem.

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."

Kyle_R
Junior Member

since 1999-08-23

Posts 12
Honolulu, HI, USA

8 posted 1999-08-23 07:58 PM

thanks for the open arms Elizabeth and hoot. i hope to string along more artistry of the mind...

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