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Waiting in the Shadows
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Waiting in the Shadows |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I see you waiting in the shadows for the rising of the moon, embracing nature's splendor hearing her rhythmic tune. A breeze lifts your scent to me, I feel the spirit of your soul. In awe I wait to bear witness as you and the night become whole. As the clouds of heaven part to reveal the moon's full glow, I silently turn and walk away, from a man I'll never know. |
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blueloon Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 161NY |
I feel as if every woman in here will be able to relate to your simple, yet powerful words. I know for sure that I can. Excellent work. blueloon |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
PoetdeVine, I guess you had your reasons. Enjoyed the poem |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
This was beautifully done, but I got the impression that what was standing and waiting was not a man even though you mentioned turning away from a man you'd never know at the end. Am I correct or just reading it wrong? Is there something else there or is this just another one of my interpretations that people normally look at me rather strangely for? |
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Sue Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 383France |
Echoes of disillusion. Lovely. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Temptress! Very good...there is deeper story here, not one that's easily seen. I wanted to imply something other than what you read! Very good, my dear!  |
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Craig Member
since 1999-06-10
Posts 444 |
I get more out of this every time I read it, you have an art PDV ( and a heart) |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
It's wonderfully written, deVine one. I'd like to know the story. |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
I'd like to know the story too....very powerful work, deVine. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "If I could be an angel, I'd make your every wish come true. But I am only human, just a woman lovin' you..." Trisha Yearwood |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
What can I say, you are an excellent poet, dear Lady.  ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© |
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pen of passion Member
since 1999-08-11
Posts 234 |
Are we subtly speaking of love here? |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
No clue as to what it might be (airhead701 speaks!) But, Poet deVine, this piece has your name written all over it-if I had read this without knowing the author's name, I'd have thought it was you. I like your style, keep it up! ------------------ *Elizabeth* "Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low, But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..." |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
What mystery! I could feel the night all around me as I read this. Lovely work P dV. |
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Kyle_R Junior Member
since 1999-08-23
Posts 12Honolulu, HI, USA |
i don't know why but your poem saddens me. sweetly worded, yet a sense of longing is woven all throughout your lines. perhaps it's just me. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Since this has gotten such a good response, I've decided to expand the story and will work on a trilogy. I sincerely appreciate all your kind words! It means a great deal to me. |
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traveler Member
since 1999-08-17
Posts 119 |
Well I hope he follows or she turns around ... another wonderful poem ... thank you |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
PdV, whatever you come up with to add to your list of classics will be none the less a thrillogy. ------------------ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW, so deep and such mystery, I love it |
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DARILYN SUE Junior Member
since 1999-08-03
Posts 22HOUSTON, TX |
Beautful! |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all again. I am amazed! I had this sitting in my poetry folder on my computer and don't know why I never posted it before! Maybe I better get in there and clean house more often! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Poet deVine, Don't know how I missed this one? Excellent job of expressing something almost everyone goes through. Big TU. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
I may be wrong here, but I looked at this more spiritually. But then that is how I tend to look at things. Nevertheless, it is great! You have great talent! |
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