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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA 
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Masquerade I hid behind a mask Painted smiles Covered tears Hidden scars The image in the mirror Always reflecting Someone I didn’t even recognize There in my costume I felt safe Life, my greatest act You saw beyond the masquerade Demanded I reveal The person underneath the mask I shuddered to think My life revealed My faults bared That you may not like what you see But when the final velvet curtain fell When I took my final bow When the masquerade had ended And my costume dropped to the floor... You were still there Waiting in the wings ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald [This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 08-20-99).] [This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 08-21-99).] |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Clever play on words hoot, there really are two sets of masks here, the kind you wear over your face, and the kind you wear over you! ------------------ Sanity is the playground for the unimaginative. |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
This was well written ... good imagery ... I enjoyed the read. In the sixth stanza ... did you mean "shuddered" rather than "shuttered"? ------------------ "Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus" (When I hear the bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.") |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
very well portrayed, Hoot. We all wear those masks sometimes...and we're always afraid when unmasking time comes. (check your 21st line) |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Whether consciously or not, I think at one time everyone puts a mask on...and if we have been hurt too many times, a mask is our only protection.....This is very good!  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Very good, hoot!!! And when you find someone who sees beyond the mask and accepts that sight, it's incredible... the greatest applause in the world is the sound of one special pair of hands clapping. *S* |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thank you all for your kind comments and thanks for picking up on my mistakes, sometimes tend to miss them Hugs  Ruth |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Sometimes the masks we wear face inward. Excellent work, Hoot. ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
I'm tortoise - does that count for the same? My shell is so thick, You'd need an axe to remove it!! It's a safety zone, when you're feelings are exposed to the harsh environment, just like a sensitve tooth!! Ouch....most of us participate in that masquerade, I'm afraid.....(sigh) Piece well written ! **clapping** ------------------ - poet FemmeFatale "The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet [This message has been edited by poetFemmeFatale (edited 08-21-99).] |
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Sue Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 383France |
Applause! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Many thanks Dream, Sue and Poet Poet...it is amazing how hard that shell forms sometimes isn't it?? ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Ah, this really hit home for me. Like many others, I've also taken part in the Masquerade, hiding my feelings. It's hard, thats for sure...exellently written. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "If I could be an angel, I'd make your every wish come true. But I am only human, just a woman lovin' you..." Trisha Yearwood |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Nicely done, Hoot. Keep it up. |
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IsabelleSkye Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 253 |
I know exactly what you mean. Isn't the person who sticks by us even after they know ALL amazing? *hugs* Izzy |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Alwye Inclan and Isabella...thank you for your comments Isabella...that is so very true |
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Kelly Member
since 1999-07-03
Posts 145 |
I like it. It's something I can relate to. |
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