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Missed_fantasy Junior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 16Mankato, MN, USA |
Unusual tear tearing down my cheeks giving my voice that scratchy quality as I tell you of my love, holding eachother with weak quaking arms Bodies not willing to accept their fates Separate entities from their hearts Take my heart with you when you go It needs your company to make it tick Useless without your adjoining soul Like that of a fresh corpse, still bloody As it congeals and hardens in death I'll giftwrap it in shiny paper Stamp and address it if you should forget Be sure to open it right away Let it feel you close so it may revive Better that one piece of me should survive than all of me exist to drearily My heart without you is impossible like a sky without sun or wet and no dry Like a silken pillowcase void of the pillow or a door with no handle and I locked inside with you on the outside and I'm pounding to get out and reach you ------------------ Love always and blessed be my children |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
This is seriously lovely. I like the way you have created your images, particularly the pillowcase! |
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Emmy Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 194KY |
My heart ached when I read this one. Well done, well done. Your imagery was great |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I liked this one. You have a gift of imagery that is wonderful to read!  |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
oh...this is painful, but so, so beautiful, with awesome imagery. Well done...very. ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
WOW....very nicely written. I love the imagery in this one and the last two lines...a perfect ending to a perfect piece!!! ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald |
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