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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN 
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-------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Do you remember me or wonder where I am in your memory do you touch my hand pass me on the street without a second glance walk right out of my life and never look back do you remember me when I was just a child rock me gently perchance to dream awhile you were there and i was there and one day you were gone won't you tell me daddy did i do something wrong? If you remember me after all these years would you hold me tight and wipe away the tears would you even know me if i walked right in would you turn to me and say how long has it been do you remember me.... *posted last month in critical analysis, any comments? ------------------ Kay-lynn **A dream is a wish your heart makes :) |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Red - comments? Yeah - this was really really sad and well-written. Speaking from the other side of that poem, I felt the same sadness and regret and longing. You touched me with these words. |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
thanks redwriter...though this poem brings back painful memories (my father did not recognize me when i was but 13  )...i enjoyed it nonetheless  |
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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN |
Thank you both. Sometimes it feels better just knowing someone else has gone through the same thing.. (smile).. Thank you listening. ------------------ Kay-lynn **A dream is a wish your heart makes :) |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Unfortunately, many time the child does feel that it's his/her fault. That is the tragedy. |
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pen of passion Member
since 1999-08-11
Posts 234 |
Great poem. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Very, very sad. I understand. |
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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN |
thank you .. and by the way. The ironic part of this whole story is, we went to his funeral (please don't laugh) but I recorded the song "The greatest man I never knew" so play during the service. I had to use the VFW tape recorder and unknowly, it's batteries were very low. So during the service, they started the tape, and this weird distorted voice started singing.. thhhheee greeeeaattesstt mannn... in a low manly moaning voice. My sisters and are just could not contain the intense laughter, I bit my lip so hard I thought blood was running down my lip..! Here I was trying to make some gradious statement.. and fell flat on my face. I had tears running down my face but only because nothing my father had done, even in death, ever turned out right. Thanks for a great laugh DAd.! (if nothing else).(sigh) ------------------ Kay-lynn **A dream is a wish your heart makes :) |
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