Open Poetry #1 |
A Kindergarten Song and a Brother’s Love |
Sunshine
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A Kindergarten Song and a Brother’s Love You are my sunshine, my only sunshine all the little voices sing You make me happy, when skies are gray their tiny voices ring You'll never know dear, how much I love you and Michael listened close one day Please don't take my sunshine away and learned through them a way to pray. The other night, dear, As I lay sleeping Michael’s sister was born quite ill I dreamt I held you in my arms she lay quiet, alone and still When I awoke, dear, I was mistaken as she heard these words of love spoken And hung my head and cried her stirring became a sign she’d awoken. You are my sunshine, my only sunshine Her brother kept singing You make me happy, when skies are gray His sister to make well You'll never know dear, how much I love you He battled the furious fight Please don't take my sunshine away and brought her back overnight. I'll always love you and make you happy So there is a Being who loves If you will only love me too Looking over from above But if you leave me to love another and I’ll never leave the Lord or this song You'll regret it all some day for with my sunshine I still belong. ©KRJ 15 Aug 99 ------------------ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 08-15-99).] |
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Sue Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 383France |
I love the way you used the words of the song, very effective. A heart-wrenching poem. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Original, I love the way you put this together. Very touching, I read a story about this once. What a creative piece! |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Very creative and cleverly done with imagination. Sunshine....on the Forum Makes me happy Sunshine....on the Forum Makes me smile |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Unusual and creative you did a good job. |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Touching. I have read the story as well. This describes it better, I think |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Excellent! I liked the way you did this. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you all for your comments. I think that will be my next challenge to all of you wonderful writers...Creativity! Long Life PiP! ------------------ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
Hey Sunshine, hopefully you'll see this this comment when you are back online. this is one of your best so far. You should post it in CA. I loved it. ------------------ Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. JP |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Ahhh Karilea....I love the way you did this... thank you for sharing it with us...you've had me in tears. Such a special little boy... how beautiful. sigh Maree beautiful lady Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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