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Hold On To Me |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA 
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Hold on to me Let me comfort you when you hurt Hold on to me Let me love you when you hate yourself Hold on to me Let me help you through your trials I am the joy in your smile I am the tears that you cry I am in every beat of your heart Hold on to me. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Very pretty Tara, but I couldn't find the rythm... (constructive criticism!)  ------------------ ...the things I did not know at first, I learned by doing twice. -Billy Joel |
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Delores Hall Member
since 1999-07-16
Posts 342USA |
To Tara enjoyed your poem.Happy writing. |
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Terri Member
since 1999-08-08
Posts 82Turtle Creek, PA |
I liked it! Maybe it wasn't your intention but this is something I would like to give to my children. It pretty well sums up how I feel about them, how I'd like them to see me...to know I'll always be there for them and a part of them. Thank you! |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
terri, thank you. actually, i did write it for the teens i work with, so the feeling you got from it is pretty much what i intended. christopher, no, there's not much rhythm to it, mainly what i wanted to get across was a quiet sense of urgency, support, comfort. |
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