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Counting Sheep |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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OK, I couldn't sleep, so you all have to suffer the depravity of my tired wanderings!  Visions of a deep-sea blue, a twisted midnight hue. Haunted pictures, dread that grew, madness real or so untrue? Bound in dreams without a clue, through my mind, so dark, I flew! Then bright light, a whole new view, ghoulish remains of Thanatos' crew. A curse of hate at me they spew, reviled, I then took my cue. My heart so heavy, filled with rue, if one can play, then so can two! So I made my way through hell's strange zoo, to meet the demon, and demand my due. "Release me now!" I beg, I sue. I tremble and shake, I cry, that too. Then came this, from the one I woo; "What have we here? It's a bleating ewe!" He cocks his head, his eyeballs skew, "Let me go, oh please!" I coo. Of what his thoughts, I never knew, those memories are so dim, so few. But on that night, I often chew, ‘twas weird to wake at morning new! ------------------ ...the things I did not know at first, I learned by doing twice. -Billy Joel |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Christopher, if I had something handy to swat you with - I would ! You say you can't write - I thought this piece was quite comical ! Especially knowing that it was written while you were HIGH on Mt. Dew, no doubt....LOL Of course you can't sleep, you silly man!! No Dew's for you after 8pm...you got that? This is your mother wanna-be talking to you !! Really nice little rhyme - did you make a list of all the words you could think of first, and then pull from there? Interesting idea for rhyme....might try it sometime.... ------------------ - poet FemmeFatale "The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet |
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Moonlight Member
since 1999-06-25
Posts 105Auburn, Alabama USA |
I really like this one, Christopher! I identify with sleeplessness. I like the flow and playfulness of this one. Thanks for a good read  ~m~ |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
NO MORE MOUNTAIN DEW!!!! But...but...poet...I couldn't...I'm suffering withdrawls already...nnnyyyhhh...augggh..!!! (by the by, if you're my wanna-be-mom, then I think I need a psychiatrist, because I'm coming down with a severe case of the Oedipus Complex!) And in a way, I made a list. It started as standard verse, but I had too many "oo's" so I made a list and... -Thank you Moonlight, sleeplessness is rough, but it gives you more time! ------------------ ...the things I did not know at first, I learned by doing twice. -Billy Joel |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
I am a therapist, however, I am not your mother ! (Thank Gawd) so you don't need an appointment after all ! Now, do you feel better knowing you no longer have a disorder ? **giggling* ------------------ - poet FemmeFatale "The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet [This message has been edited by poetFemmeFatale (edited 08-14-99).] |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
can i have a disorder too please?...by the time it was my turn in line all that was left was DSPS...so i can completely relate Christopher |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
less see here, mono-maniacism... no, A.D.D. ...what was I talking about??? Um...manic-depression....no, already taken... photophobic...no, wouldn't work wit computers...AH-HA! I've got the perfect one for you Elvira... Psycho Neurosis. It's a perfect fit in this forum! And PFF, that disorder was just one of MANY! I have what's called Democratic Neurosis: My psychosis fits whatever my split-personality votes on ------------------ ...the things I did not know at first, I learned by doing twice. -Billy Joel |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
LOL! Yeah, like YOU could ever give up your golden blood of life! |
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