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Krystal Member
since 1999-06-19
Posts 140Shelton,WA USA |
If only you knew of the destruction You left in your wake; It was in my heart to give, But your motive was to take. Like a hurricane Ripping through my heart, you tore everything solid down, Leaving me to make a new start. Like a tornado On some southwestern plain, You tore my world apart, Slowly driving me insane. Like a tidal wave bent on destruction, you tossed me upon some lonely shore; Deserted again, like some Undiscovered treasure on a deep ocean floor. Come back, I plead, Undo all this damage you've done; Like a hapless fly, I was caught In the web of deception you'd spun. Now I struggle to re-construct The pieces of my life, shard by shard, That you so mercilessly broke apart, As you disassembled my heart. ...to Chris... ------------------ Shannon D. Montgomery ("Krystal") |
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chris Junior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 29rowlett, texas, usa |
please don't judge me by my name! you've captured what i've tried so many times to. the pain that one can inflict on another is devastating. thank you for letting me know that there are others that have been hurt so deeply, but still find the strength to go on. i know i have |
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Krystal Member
since 1999-06-19
Posts 140Shelton,WA USA |
Thanks, Chris... And don't worry, I won't judge you by your name! :-) ------------------ Shannon D. Montgomery ("Krystal") |
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invertigo18 Member
since 1999-06-14
Posts 53Prairieville, LA., USA |
Excellent choice of words. The best part of it I think is the part about the web of deception. I enjoyed that most. Overall its wonderful though.  ------------------ Luke Cakalic |
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#5 PS Junior Member
since 1999-06-21
Posts 19Ogden, Utah, USA |
Good rhyme and meaning, I really like the "come back to me" poems, very heart felt... ------------------ #5 Poetic Society |
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Krystal Member
since 1999-06-19
Posts 140Shelton,WA USA |
Invertigo 18... Thank you, and I'm glad you let me know what you like, it helps me when others point out what they like the most! #5... Thanks so very much! Glad to hear from you... :-) ------------------ Shannon D. Montgomery ("Krystal") |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
Krystal, Good job! This is excellent. It is Chris' misfortune that he has chosen to neglect a woman so passionate. And...Thanks for liking "Old Cop." sandman |
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Krystal Member
since 1999-06-19
Posts 140Shelton,WA USA |
Wow!! Thanks, Fred! I'm glad you think so... And you're welcome for the comments about "Old Cop"... but it was my pleasure to read such a work of art! :-) ------------------ Shannon D. Montgomery ("Krystal") |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
the "stormy weather" of love...*sigh*  ------------------ Childhood Memories...your countenance...hoarse whispers...My One and Only...Tribute to M.J... serving wench...the mistress...stolen hours...devotion...Master...apart... |
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Rita Member
since 1999-07-19
Posts 55Danville Va. 24540 |
I can really relate! Great poem!! |
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Krystal Member
since 1999-06-19
Posts 140Shelton,WA USA |
Elvira... thank you. Rita... thanks, but it's sad that you can relate. I hope you've found respite from the storm. ------------------ Shannon D. Montgomery ("Krystal") |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
I loved "Like a hurricane ...", "Like a tornado ...", "Like a tidal wave ..." How could I not be caught in the whirling vortex of the weather? A |
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