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The Snore - elvira's challenge
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The Snore - elvira's challenge |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I stand here and watch as she walks out the door perplexed at the reason, all I said was ‘you snore’ Her face went white, she started to yell I backed up so suddenly I almost fell I didn’t hear half of what she said all I could think was ‘this relationship’s dead’ I was only half serious, I wanted to say it was a cute habit, but she took it the wrong way I walked around the house, thinking again that I must be the worst of men When I spied a note on the bathroom sink written in lipstick, raspberry pink "I don’t snore, you fool! Can’t you see your last girlfriend did, that’s what you told me! So you must think you’re sleeping with her You’re a louse, a creep, a slimy cur!" That night I went to bed for a quiet rest knowing the sound barrier, my lover wouldn’t test I awoke in the dark, it must have been three and discovered that, the snorer was me! |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
I liked this, excellent job. I'm told I snore, talk, and eat in my sleep. My dentist told me I grind my teeth, (how does he know?)I wonder where I've been sleeping! |
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Dragoness Senior Member
since 1999-08-07
Posts 513 |
Nicely done!!! Loved it!  ------------------ Set you heart free and your mind will follow. |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
A challenge well met!  ------------------ "Grief can take care of itself, but to get the full value of joy you must have somebody to divide it with." *Mark Twain* |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I seem to remember something about a snore, deVine one........... |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
.......a snore dear sir? Whatever can you mean? Mayhaps it was some other poet who first snored upon the scene! But this challenge, taken and given was to put myself in manly shoes a fate that leaves me shiverin' (I'm practicing for National Bad Poetry Day on Wednesday!) |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
very well done deVine, you are so spontaneous when it comes to creating a poem ! ...'fraid others did not like my challenge too much  ...of course, and i know i've said this before, women never snore  PS: i am not satisfied with my gender-bender poem yet, so it'll be a few more days before i post mine (in the adult forum) |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I feel a shameless plug here......if you have not chanced to read anything in the adult forum, I highly recommend it! But please, take your heart pills before you enter...you're going to need 'em!!!! Bring ice...lots of ice!!! |
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