Open Poetry #1 |
Eden (For Pandora) |
Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
EDEN There's a smile lost across the gloss- Of a most weary, teary eye. And there's a dream beneath the gleam- Unseen, unsought, aching to fly. A child, dear child, somewhere searching- For the understanding of the wise. Easily mistaken and forsaken- In a world of vast and ghastly lies. A soul yearning, bleeding, burning, Blinded by its own innocence; Wanders and strays, dies and decays- In the garden of decadence. Where blossoms bloom beneath the gloom- Of a loomy, lazy willow that whines. Where the water stills, and the cold wind chills, And no one's ever really seen the sun shine. For shadows play throughout the day- Just to wither away the hour. As the worst and best die on the quest- For the touch of a mystical flower. And the night sky glows just beyond rows- Of luminous flowers, a thousandfold. But we dare not speak of that which we seek, Lest Death come to us in Seclusion's hold. Is there a spark deep in the dark- That can only be seen by the blind? Is the only sense to creed and credence- The creation of a sterile mind? Are the dreams we relish and embellish- Just pasifications of our impotence? Is the desire to love, and to be loved- Sanctification of self-indifference? For in the garden, begging of pardon, Carefully avoiding all eye contact. We pass in hurry and wretched worry- Of what we might miss should we interact. Searching for the rose, Fate's to disclose Never once looking to the sky, above. Oh, will disenchanted eyes ever realize- A rose is but a symbol, God is love. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
If there ever was a perfectly written poem, this has to be it! Nothing else to say!! |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Ah I agree with the deViness - perfection, sir. ------------------ - poet FemmeFatale "The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Nothing is perfect but this comes close. Packed full of sagacious wisdom and in rhyme no less. |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
A pleasure to experience. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
....and we have RAVE REVUES from the Peanut Gallery!! ------------------ Nay, if our wits run the Wild-Goose chase, I am done: For thou hast more of the Wild-Goose in one of thy wits, Than I am sure I have in my whole five. ~ ²1592 Wm. Shakespeare ~ Romeo & Juliet ~ ii. iv. 75 |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Have you ever been listening to a beautiful song and it gives you chills? Goose-bumps even? Well, I got goose-bumps reading this piece... WOW! I even had tears in my eyes... call me a sensitive fool.... I love this piece, I really, really do... ------------------ ~onevoice~ "She looked at her life like lines, never-ending, constantly forming, reforming and bending." |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Excellent slice of your soul! You may be assured that I will read all of your verse should it be as good as this. ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© |
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pandora Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 184 |
For me? REALLY? Omigod, Micheal, this is absolutely beautiful. Are you sure there's not another pandora in your life? Michael, it's so good to see you back posting again! We've missed you so much. This poem proves your craft-- you are indeed an artist. I'm looking forward to seeing you in dc. You're still coming, right? Now I need to read this again.... and again... your words/rhythm/meter... all of it, is just perfectly crafted and says so much about love, life, and God's hand in our lives. Thank you for writing this and sharing it with us! luv, pandora |
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Ron
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-05-19
Posts 8669Michigan, US |
We've discussed this style often enough I don't even have to tell you how incredible I think this piece is. Wow. Is this new, Michael, or have you been holding out? As for the content, such wisdom and Truth need no comment from such as me. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Not much more to say, Michael, that hasn't been said. I appreciate the effort that went into this piece. Well done. |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
I am almost speechless, the feeling I had as I read this, it was like overwhelming. I can't say that a poem has ever done to me what this one has, and for some reason I just can't explain it. Your talent is wonderful, and I look forward to reading more. |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Near perfection, Michael. The feeling, the flow, it's all absolutely wonderful. What more can I say?? Beautiful.. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "If I could be an angel, I'd make your every wish come true. But I am only human, just a woman lovin' you..." Trisha Yearwood |
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Artur Hawkwing Member
since 1999-06-30
Posts 444USA |
This must have been divinely inspired. I can feel the anguish of this world, as this is truly a paradise lost. Tis a crushing loss. This one haunts the human soul. Good one, Michael. |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Michael, I like this one so much, I felt it needed to stay up top for awhile longer. ------------------ ~onevoice~ "She looked at her life like lines, never-ending, constantly forming, reforming and bending." |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
Michael, This was wonderful! How it got past me, I've no idea! I wish I could add more to what has already been said..I'm afraid I can not. This is a beautiful poem... |
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thursdayschild Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 169Houston, Tx. |
concur with all above comments, this is a most excellent piece of work! Thanks for sharing it. |
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