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Mark R.
Member

since 1999-06-25

Posts 113
San Francisco, CA.

0 posted 1999-08-13 07:27 AM

I sit here underneath these trees,
Overlooking the rising seas.
Constant thoughts drive me insane,
As I await the cold, hard rain.

Thoughts of passion....
Thoughts of pain....
Thoughts without ration....
And thoughts in vain,

So many feelings I collect in shame,
Someone please help stop, this runaway
train.

Suddenly, a warm wind blows embracing
me....
Comforting me.....
Opening my eyes allowing me to see,
That life is what I wish it to be.

In turn, I lower myself to a knee,
Thanking the "Lord" for making me free.

And as I gaze from under these great towers,
I shake and cower at "Mother Natures"
power.
The trees shed their blossoms and flowers,
As I am enveloped by their velvet showers....

[This message has been edited by Mark R. (edited 08-13-99).]

angel girl
Member

since 1999-07-23

Posts 322
within a whisper...

1 posted 1999-08-13 08:35 AM

Wow, this was absolutely beautiful. Great job!

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One touch of nature makes the whole world kin.
-William Shakespeare

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

2 posted 1999-08-13 09:26 AM

I loved the image of those blossoms making velvet showers..very good.

poetFemmeFatale
Member Elite

since 1999-07-25

Posts 2646
Arkansas

3 posted 1999-08-13 09:38 AM

Oh Mark, I think I've fallen in love with you & your work after reading this! (sigh with a smile)

What an extraordinary piece of work....emotions filled with the power of natures beauty all in one...BRAVO! (clapping violently!)

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- poet FemmeFatale

"The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet

elvira
Senior Member

since 1999-07-06

Posts 936
California

4 posted 1999-08-14 04:13 PM

very well done indeed, Mark...the varying format/style expressed the emotional confusion perfectly

Mark R.
Member

since 1999-06-25

Posts 113
San Francisco, CA.

5 posted 1999-08-16 11:10 AM

Thanks everyone. I'm really glad you all enjoyed this. Your words only encourage me...

pen of passion
Member

since 1999-08-11

Posts 234

6 posted 1999-08-16 06:22 PM

I could visualize that last line. Great poem!

Carolina Girl
Member

since 1999-08-14

Posts 63

7 posted 1999-08-16 06:34 PM

I'm a TOTAL nature lover...and this poem gave credit to the beauty of nature and how we fit into the BIG scheme of life....Wonderful poem!

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

8 posted 2004-04-18 01:37 PM

very soft and warm, comforting

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