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JP
Senior Member

since 1999-05-25

Posts 1343
Loomis, CA

0 posted 1999-08-12 12:11 PM

The heavenly host, and hot buttered toast.
Sunday prayer interrupted by football
or is the other way around?
Our god is recognized by
the green color of his ink.
Our seasons are celebrated by buying,
giving, and praying about getting.
Put the Christ back in Christmas
if he was there at all.
Let freedom ring! Let it ring!
If it can afford the bell
Forgive the sinners who overcrowd hell.
Forgiveness? A joke. This is a word,
that makes mankind choke.
How can you forgive what you do?
when you knew it was wrong. You knew.
Bombs blasting, curses casting
all the while
video games drone on in hot chocolate dreams.

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Dum spiro, spero
JP

Sue
Member

since 1999-08-04

Posts 383
France

1 posted 1999-08-12 02:42 AM

The modern world really does make you feel sick, doesn't it? Very well put.

elvira
Senior Member

since 1999-07-06

Posts 936
California

2 posted 1999-08-12 04:11 AM

though you have listed many atrocities in this poem, living in a western nation, 'tis conspicuous consumption i despise the most, as i consider myself a minimalist

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

3 posted 1999-08-12 10:15 AM

You do have a way of getting to the point, my friend.....

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 1999-08-12 10:47 AM

Hang 'em high, JP! Good job!

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© KRJ
Sunshine
Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

5 posted 1999-08-12 11:07 AM

Nan said it, you do have a point. Nice read

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

6 posted 1999-08-12 11:14 AM

Excellent. Only one exception that I can see. I would like to hope there is more forgiveness in the world than what you say in your poem - or perhaps it's not forgiveness, just disinterest. Anyway, I liked this!

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