Open Poetry #1 |
My sailor - My sun |
poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
I finally find a match to fit my checklist in Romance... He's everything I want & need except he does not dance !! Now how can I convince him that he needs me in his life ? He's always stood so strong alone - his past contains his strife... I'm convinced that he's my savior - the sailor for my sea... He's the lighthouse on my shoreline that beckons, calls to me. For years I've raged and tossed & churned - my tide out of control... I've damaged all within my wake for this I pay with soul. I promise not to hurt this man he brings peace to my storm. He shines on me my waters calm - I sparkle with sun, warm.... ------------------ - poet FemmeFatale "The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet |
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Sue Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 383France |
Good luck to you! I dream, too. |
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Craig Member
since 1999-06-10
Posts 444 |
Excellent Poem, the content was well thought out and brilliantly executed. Well done |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Great work! I loved it! |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Femme, this is wonderful work. The scheme is good, the flow great and the words and meaning clear. That vacation was good, huh? |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Hey you! Where ya been? Lovely, lovely poem - I hope that was a true account for you!? Nice to read your work again. ------------------ 'Only the shallow know themselves.' Oscar Wilde. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Agree with Balladeer, wonderful work Big TU. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Thanks all for the nice replies - Balladeer, I had a great vacation...of course (wink)...Severn, so nice to hear from you again too! Been on a vacation to the ocean to get some inspiration for my writing...and to relax...but I'm back & stronger than ever! Read my new stuff in Adult, I think you'll approve! Thanks everyone for keeping my spirits up and my faith strong ! Love you all ! ------------------ - poet FemmeFatale "The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Nice one poet ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald |
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Alwye
Moderator
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Beautiful, nicely executed. Good luck!! ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "Your kiss upon my face feels like a brush with grace, baby thats all it takes to take me higher..." SHeDaisy |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
Yep, this one gets smile and gentle nod. Very well done. ------------------ Dum spiro, spero JP |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like this very much!!! And if you find a way to persuade your sunshine that he needs you, too... would you share your secret? *G* |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
You bet Suthern....what is it about men that they don't NEED us.....I want someone that NEEDS me - you know, not hanging on me all the time as if incapible, but it's nice to know they gotta have you....! (pulling my hair out in frustration) ------------------ - poet FemmeFatale "The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet |
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ac Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 129Cayey, PR - USA |
i couldn't agree with you more...it's not that men have to become excruciatingly needy that they need you to match their socks... but it sure is nice to know that they couldn't live without your love...great poem... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well done, pff! |
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