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Spite- written in a fit of release.
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Spite- written in a fit of release. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
I hate my life for the mess it's made of me and it's strife. Despair is my song the only tune I know yet it comes out wrong. Casual words bleed a chorus of unconcern that ignores my need. Needing compassion, I am struck by the force of her dispassion. Once in my heart, how she did leave is where this story does start. She told me today for three years she has lied to me in every way. I ask for concern yet each of my efforts she does constantly spurn. Again today I discovered why men are violent to women, the reason is uncovered. They try to provoke such a reaction then quietly smile at the heart they broke. All women are the same is what I don't want to believe, feeling so is my shame. Is someone there for me, a Lady who will soothe my Beast and not ignore my sanity? ©1999 DreamEvil ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© [This message has been edited by DreamEvil (edited 08-10-99).] |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Wow, I read this once, and had to read it again...such really deep emotions in this piece. All women are not the same...unfortunately, you got a taste of the BAD kind...the kind that only think of themselves. Humans hurt eachother for only one reason...selfishness - in some form or another. Keep looking up and you will find that someone who will love you truly... Great work! ------------------ - poet FemmeFatale "The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
I also had to read this more than once, Dream. So much raw emotion...yes, you've seen the bad kind of women...I despise them too, as most of the halfway good women do. We aren't all like this. Excellent work, my friend, as always.  ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "Your kiss upon my face feels like a brush with grace, baby thats all it takes to take me higher..." SHeDaisy |
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Dragoness Senior Member
since 1999-08-07
Posts 513 |
There are women who love and women who hurt.You've looked in the wrong places love.The good ones are out there. ------------------ Set you heart free and your mind will follow. |
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Gentle Soul Member
since 1999-07-12
Posts 273Vinton,Ohio USA |
I agree with Dragoness... *hugs* love ya brother ------------------ Gënt£ë¤§°û£ |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
This piece sits badly with me. But it's good work. ------------------ "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." -Charles Brugnot |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Oh dear, hurt is a universal thing. We women can be such cows, sometimes. The flip side to be the only species that can think and create beyond survivalist instinct is our awful capacity to hurt others. But of course - we can love too! Don't give up. Hey - you write great poetry, that's got to be a comfort right? |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
 I'm sorry your hurting in such a way,The right one will come along some day. Not all woman are the same...some may hurt intentionally, but they say we hurt the ones closest to us. It only hurts worse cause we feel so deep to the ones we love.. Hang in there Dream! Keep chaneling through your words! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah Dream, set the bad ones free and close your eyes, the goods ones will come much to your surprise. ------------------ © KRJ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
I am so sorry that you are hurting so badly. I wish you were here to talk about it. I miss you... Good work, excellent. ------------------ ~onevoice~ "She looked at her life like lines, never-ending, constantly forming, reforming and bending." |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Thank you, everyone for the words of encouragement, but my past and present experiences with women make what you say very hard to believe. With friends and more like you, I will always try to keep an open mind. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I think you should become a monk. Live in a monastery that prohibits talking and will not allow you to have writing materials! (Do you feel better with *that* as an alternative?) If I had a quarter for every time I felt this way about men, I'd be wealthy! We take from life what we put into it! Smile and move on! |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Here's the smile.I have moved on, just every once in awhile, the past haunts me. |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
You have to have a little faith...I'm not sure it's about either women or men but more to do with how each of us actually feel and show our care...if our attitudes on that don't fit, chances are, the couple in the relationship won't either...but sometimes we have to leave in order to know what we lost or gained...depending on your point of view.. But take heart, there are other's whose future haunts them, rather than their past....well, that all sounds depressing and it wasn't meant to be at all... HUGS ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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