Open Poetry #1 |
Looking for critques |
Lynx New Member
since 1999-08-08
Posts 3Monterey, TN USA |
Lynn Rising When my eyes first glimpse Through dim morning light And wind chimes gently ring In the brisk morning wind Asking questions as well As answering them Your presence I see glowing From rays of nightstand light As finely draped morning seeps in From gentle North Carolina mountains Words of good morning Breaks the silence in the air As I ponder your presence While reclining in your bed Wondering myriad morning things Upon a long nights peaceful sleep Long glances, smiles and sleepy eyes Surround the rainbow sheets Until your morning paces From kitchen to bathroom And all the in-betweens Slow sax playing soft And as gentle as I feel As I ponder if I shall Leave this bed of sweet dreams And stir from my slumbering Or deeply dwell within this fantasy That somehow became real |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
if you are seeking constructive criticism, you may want to post your poem in the "critical analysis" forum...Welcome Lynx ------------------ I will live my life as i, will undoubtedly die - alone. ~Morrissey~ |
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