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Lynx
New Member
since 1999-08-08
Posts 3
Monterey, TN USA

0 posted 1999-08-08 11:09 PM


Lynn Rising


When my eyes first glimpse
Through dim morning light
And wind chimes gently ring
In the brisk morning wind
Asking questions as well
As answering them

Your presence I see glowing
From rays of nightstand light
As finely draped morning seeps in
From gentle North Carolina mountains
Words of good morning
Breaks the silence in the air
As I ponder your presence
While reclining in your bed
Wondering myriad morning things
Upon a long nights peaceful sleep

Long glances, smiles and sleepy eyes
Surround the rainbow sheets
Until your morning paces
From kitchen to bathroom
And all the in-betweens

Slow sax playing soft
And as gentle as I feel
As I ponder if I shall
Leave this bed of sweet dreams
And stir from my slumbering
Or deeply dwell within this fantasy
That somehow became real


© Copyright 1999 Lynx - All Rights Reserved
elvira
Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936
California
1 posted 1999-08-09 02:43 PM


if you are seeking constructive criticism, you may want to post your poem in the "critical analysis" forum...Welcome Lynx

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I will live my life as i, will undoubtedly die - alone. ~Morrissey~

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