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Fallen New Member
since 1999-08-08
Posts 3Blissfield ,Michigan ,US |
You took the vows and said I do, You ate the food and went to the motel room. WE shared our thoughts, We smiled and laughed, We started our lives in a mad dash. Promises were made promises are broken. Who was to know we were headed for somthing unspoken. Our children were borne into this marriage, and all I see now- THAT IS THE CARRIAGE IS BROKEN. ------------------ Brian |
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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN |
Dear BRian.. It's obvious you have much more to say on this topic... get a piece of paper and pencil... and.. write ALL OF IT!... you're writing in scraps.. (which is fine) but... get it all out.. and look at it on paper.. then decide what you want to REALLY say.. cause.. I can see you really want to say something....but...are lost in scraps of feelings... (this is not a bad thing).. just trying to help.  |
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PrincessDoo Junior Member
since 1999-07-30
Posts 41Cerritos, CA, USA |
my dear the above is right... it might be best to write a letter... but poems are wonderful... get it all out hun .. let it all out |
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