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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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My plates are made of plastic A regal shade of blue As are my knives and forks and spoons And serving dishes, too. If, by some chance I stumble, As I am passing by And knock them off the table They do not break....they do not die. I have two plastic goldfish Within a plastic bowl Providing relaxation To ease a troubled soul. As long as I am careful To keep the batteries dry They'll swim along forever They do not sink....they do not die. I have a cocker spaniel I named my buddy Ruff. He doesn't run or chase a ball - How can he when he's stuffed? But he is always there for me. Where I am-there he lies And, though he'll never lick my face, He does not leave....he does not die. Your picture hangs above my bed. The glass and frame are fake But if it falls down from the wall It has no chance to break. Your beauty takes my breath away. Your smile of sweet delight Dispels the gloom from my small room; Illuminates the night. I place my fingers on your cheek And, teardrops in my eye, I disregard reality...... You don't get sick You do not die. |
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Ron
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-05-19
Posts 8669Michigan, US |
In reality, there's this little thing called inertia that prevents planes and trains from making 180 degree turns in the blink of the proverbial eye. Fortunately for us, Balladeer, you know no such constraints - and your readers never quite know what destination lies ahead when they start on a journey with you. Go ahead! Lead me right up to the very edge of poignancy without me even knowing it. Then push me off! I cannot imagine a poem any more perfectly crafted than this… |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
High praise, Ron, that means more to me than you can imagine. Thank you. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Ok....I was going to make some cute poetic comeback about your plastic blowup doll girlfriend, until the last stanza! You made me cry again! In my dictionary under the word perfection is a picture of you! Wonderful poem! |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Sir Balladeer, I need a box of tissues now, for only one was left. You really are amazing, Your poems are always so moving. |
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fjones Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 98MS |
You are a very talented Poet! I enjoy reading everything you write. Please post us some prose to enjoy! |
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Darquewing Junior Member
since 1999-07-30
Posts 20 |
very inspiring to leave the unnatural behind... I felt like I should destroy all the venier particle board in the house, and go cut and make my own furniture. Sadly some people in life find refuge in the plastic reality... may they raed this and drop a tear themselves... [This message has been edited by Darquewing (edited 08-07-99).] |
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Emmy Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 194KY |
Balladeer, you never cease to amaze me. This one really pulled on my heart-strings. I pity the person in the poem so much it hurts! Wonderful. Just wonderful. |
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Dragoness Senior Member
since 1999-08-07
Posts 513 |
How alone and lonely the person in the poem must be.Beautiful. ------------------ Set you heart free and your mind will follow. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
My warmest thanks to all of you. |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Wow, wonderful...beautifully crafted! I loved the last stanza. Your talent never falters, Balladeer! ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "Your kiss upon my face feels like a brush with grace, baby thats all it takes to take me higher..." SHeDaisy |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
I have to join the others when I say this was great. You are surely a very talented writer.  |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
May we all take heed from your words, M&M.... This is truly awesome..... |
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Sue Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 383France |
Sorrows great, and comforts few I wish my tears were plastic too |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
I don't know what to say that hasn't already been said... all I can say is WOW!!!! ------------------ ~onevoice~ "She looked at her life like lines, never-ending, constantly forming, reforming and bending." |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Again....my warmest thanks to all of you. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
And my warmest thanks to you for posting this beautiful poem. As always i did enjoy. |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
I'm always totally with you and then I fall apart...I don't know how you do it..:-) Hugs ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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Terri Member
since 1999-08-08
Posts 82Turtle Creek, PA |
From a grin to tears in a blink of the eye...can't remember the last time my emotions shifted gears so quickly! |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Balladeer's knives and forks, Are plastic yes it's true, And why he tries to housetrain Ruff, Makes us all confused? His "lady" in the picture frame, He met through a magazine, She's really wild and hard to tame But the finest I've ever seen. He too can take her breath away, Since the first time that they dated He must be careful when he "plays" Because she is inflated. Balladeer...Seriously...this was another masterpiece my friend..... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I don't think there are any verses left to sing in this song of praise... and you really wouldn't want to be subjected to my singing... ahem... talents! *G* So I'll just hum the chorus... Wonderful!!!! |
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Poetwheel Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 208Canada |
Fantastic piece of work! Perhaps its my nature, but I was waiting for a humerous hook at the end, but you spun things perfectly, as you often do. I'm thinking this is a parallel to a hunchback of notre dame type of thing, yes?.. PW ------------------ Poetic Wheelbarrow http://www.stormloader.com/poetwheel/den.html ICQ: 44370408 |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Sir Balladeer, once again you have taken us too the window of life an shown us a view that we rarely see for ourselves. Thanks again for your offerings. |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
Sir Balladeer .. "The King of Twist"!! |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
I am so glad Terri commented on this, thus I went back, dug it up and am so glad I did....I missed this while I was gone....!! I spent a great deal of time this morning looking back 20 pgs. or so to see what I had missed, but somehow this slipped by me! Thank you dearest Terri for alerting me to this masterpiece from Romeo himself ! **curtsie** ------------------ - poet FemmeFatale "The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet |
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ac Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 129Cayey, PR - USA |
can't believe i almost missed this one... another masterpiece from the great... amazing how you spin gold out of those plastic knives and plates...loved it... |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Balladeer, Oh! I was not expecting this... you brought a tear to my eye. You are so amazing.. making me laugh one minute and cry the other. I'm so glad I am finding these gems. Hugs, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
i was here in open 1 today searching for a poem i wrote a long long time ago and while i was here, i saw this poem of yours which i had never read before, i don't think... *sigh*... and this touched me and made me sad ... but it also made me want to tell you how much i appreciate your awesome talent as a thinker and writer.... you are just so fabulous, michael! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Enjoying again.... and still impressed. *S* |
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