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pusskatt
Junior Member

since 1999-07-22

Posts 30
Austrralia

0 posted 1999-08-07 07:27 AM

I have a secert lover
I must keep him to myself
he fills my soul with passion
and no "body" can take his place

our passion is unconventional
yet I cannot say "no more"
I await each night to hear him
and he leaves me wanting more

We met quite by accident
the timing was just right
both of us were empty
both in a loveless fight

We fill each other's empty place
thought I have never even seen his face
I've never held or touched his hand
for he lives in a far away land

And yet we are indeed lovers
I never knew that this could be
but when he rings me late at night
I know what will
will be......

Toerag
Member Ascendant

since 1999-07-29

Posts 5622
Ala bam a

1 posted 1999-08-07 08:37 AM

Puss............great title....great poem....I like this!

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

2 posted 1999-08-07 08:42 AM

I do, too!!!! Ahhhhh, what the sound of a beloved voice can do....

LngJhnAg
Member Elite

since 1999-07-23

Posts 3508
Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

3 posted 1999-08-07 08:46 AM

Puss

I liked the story line - could completely relate. The title was great, too. The rhyming part and style needs a little more polish - the first stanza didn't have a rhyme, then the second stanza used the same word. in the second and fourth lines. The rhythm in third stanza came fast, but the fourth stanza changed the rhyming pattern and rhythm. Overall, I enjoyed the story a lot - been there and done that - additionally, you captured something many people have yet to realize - personal appearance (looks) do not matter when hearts are sympatico. Nice theme, nice approach.

pusskatt
Junior Member

since 1999-07-22

Posts 30
Austrralia

4 posted 1999-08-08 12:40 PM

Thank you all, glad you liked it.

LngJhnAg.... A big thank you for your help!

pusskatt
Junior Member

since 1999-07-22

Posts 30
Austrralia

5 posted 1999-08-08 12:43 PM

Thank you all, glad you liked it.

LngJhnAg... A big thanks for your help!

Pusskatt.

elvira
Senior Member

since 1999-07-06

Posts 936
California

6 posted 1999-08-09 08:58 PM

Puss, i can relate, as i don't get to see my luv very often

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one night at the airport...Childhood Memories...your countenance...eight short weeks...My One and Only...Music to my Ears...hoarse whispers...What will it be?...just watching tv...break my heart...are you ready?...Feel the need?...serving wench...Tribute to M.J....take a guess...sink or swim...stolen hours...the mistress...Perfection...a little girl...Mr. Jones...
life is like...insomnia...devotion...too soon...07-20-69...craving...Master...chat?...apart...plain...hush...then...vice...shameless self promotion

Balladeer

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

7 posted 1999-08-09 09:08 PM

Good words, pusskatt....but beware of phon-y lovers!

Alwye

Moderator

Member Elite

since 1999-06-16

Posts 3850
In the space between moments

8 posted 1999-08-09 10:36 PM

Nicely done!!

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*Krista Knutson*

"Your kiss upon my face feels like a brush with grace, baby thats all it takes to take me higher..." SHeDaisy

pusskatt
Junior Member

since 1999-07-22

Posts 30
Austrralia

9 posted 1999-08-12 05:36 AM

Thank you all for replying, it is great to get some response, this is the first time I have shown my stuff so to speak. I am very amaturish(?) and need the response. Thanks again.

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