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blueloon Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 161NY |
Look deeply into mine; behold the beauty. Look deeply into yours; Behold the beauty. Through the dark pith of mine, depict a path... belabored by many feet. Each foot brings convictions of your thoughts. Distinguish the vital force, and you will see the creature. Lay your wit upon my breast. Turn off your lamps. Attend to the rhythmic daughtlessness of my marrow. Breath in...listen...exhale... My sentiments exactly. You've looked deeply into mine and found my soul. [This message has been edited by blueloon (edited 08-07-99).] |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
yours wa a nice insight into the soul love it |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Blue I loved that part about laying wit upon your breast. That is very, very deep (snapping fingers beatnik style) |
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blueloon Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 161NY |
Thank you both for your kind words...Haven't written in awhile and it felt good! blueloon ------------------ To give yourself keeps yourself still, And you must live, drawn by your own sweet skill. -shakespeare And so of you, beauteous and lovely youth, When that shall vade, by verse distills your truth. -shakespeare |
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blueloon Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 161NY |
made some changes and wouls love some feedback...Thank you blueloon |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Superb work blue...once again, I find myself challenged to follow your thoughts into a deep well of emotion...I love the challenge! What a really nice piece, on such a wonderful subject... ------------------ - poet FemmeFatale "The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
"The eyes are the window to the soul..." I would love to take a peak into yours.....aaahhhh....  ------------------ - poet FemmeFatale "The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet |
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