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Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration

0 posted 1999-08-05 12:52 PM


Burdened by a rail of hopes,
and countless dreams of morality-
mankind lies buried,
beneath a divagation of timeless mis-conceptions.

What can and cannot be.
We are hindered,
impededed by the fear-
of our own imaginations.

Prone to push our limits,
yet doomed never to succeed.

And yet we can

-BELIEVE-

that across the threshold of the unknown,
lies true understanding
-of the past that is our future-
-and the tomorrow that is our destiny-

For splashed across the realms,
of endless possibilities,
-lay the precepts of immortality.

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Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll be among the stars.
-Unknown-

[This message has been edited by Christopher (edited 08-05-99).]

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Severn
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1 posted 1999-08-05 12:56 PM


Very good, Christopher. I think you could add another word to the formula too - HOPE. Nice work.
Poet deVine
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2 posted 1999-08-13 02:59 AM


Love these lines:

"of the past that is our future
and the tomorrow that is our destiny"

Great!

Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
3 posted 1999-08-13 03:48 AM


Thank you much ms deVine... You must've dug deep to dredge this up, it's a whole...eight days old (in here, that can be eternity!)

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...the things I did not know at first, I learned by doing twice.
-Billy Joel

poetFemmeFatale
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4 posted 1999-08-14 04:49 PM


One thing I notice about your poetry is your use of words that are very effective in setting the mood you want to portray....great job here - I could feel your emotions....? (Or ideas?)

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- poet FemmeFatale

"The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet


Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
5 posted 1999-08-14 08:45 PM


Thank you poetFF, but I think what you are really feeling here is my
BURNING HATRED FOR MANKIND!!!
crush!Kill!Destroy!Maim!Murder....
Oh, sorry, I just...ummm...yeah PFF, I think you were right

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...the things I did not know at first, I learned by doing twice.
-Billy Joel

poetFemmeFatale
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6 posted 1999-08-14 09:35 PM


Christopher - I think you and me need to have a talk....(I'm a therapist as some in here already know) But I want it to be a PUBLIC place, K? ***backing off a bit nervous**** he he he

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- poet FemmeFatale

"The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet


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