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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh....I like this one even better!!! ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Very, very nice elvira. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
I like this! It has a unique rythm that just flows!!! ------------------ Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll be among the stars. -Unknown- |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Very nice, Elvira.... ...and - Never apologize for rhyming...  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like! Great job! |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Lady E, I read both, and yes they belong together. I like the difference in feel from the negative side in free verse to the positive in rhyme. I'm not sure if this would be coming at it a little high, but I think they should be posted as one. Enjoyable as always. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
For the record - This poem is written in flawless meter.. You have alternating lines of: iambic (short/long) tetrameter (four feet) and dimeter (two feet)...... Nice job!! [This message has been edited by Nan (edited 08-05-99).] |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Well, there you have it. You are short/long and have two feet/four feet.....and, not to mention, a pair of excellent poems. Very nicely done, Elvira. |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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ac Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 129Cayey, PR - USA |
Great job in covering all those senses here in just a few words... |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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blueloon Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 161NY |
after reading this it left me with a nice tingly sensation...great work elvira. blueloon |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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