Chalice of Blood ( Geez! Who would of thought I could have written such a dark poem..

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Cobra
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since 1999-07-27

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0 posted 1999-08-04 05:55 PM

Her fragile body sits in the shadows,
she awaits her lover; dark creature of night.
A young girl's innocence lost in his eyes,
she craves and longs for his painful bite.

He rises from his velvet coffin,
he thrives on the shadows of fear.
He cast a wicked, tempting grin,
and flies to take her life so dear.

As she whimpers and crawls to her bed,
she asks of the lord a request.
She asks to be tortured in the chambers of hell,
as her cold, black heart pounds in her chest.

Her life has been a living hell,
when she dies, she'll be right back at home.
Kept in a cell, the dark ones will dwell,
and she'll become one as well.

Her devil with a handsome face,
has come to drink her life.
He walks towards her pathetic being,
in his hands, a razor-sharp knife.

One quick slit and her red blood flows,
he places her in sinking mud.
He smiles as demons take her soul,
and sips from his chalice of blood.

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Cammie

Mystic
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since 1999-07-22

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1 posted 1999-08-04 05:58 PM

Cammie! This poem was sooo dark! Very in-depth..

Cobra
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2 posted 1999-08-04 05:59 PM

Thanks Sunshine!

I don't really like dark poems, but I wrote it. So there!

Psycodillica
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3 posted 1999-08-04 06:02 PM

That was really good. I have often felt like that girl. Gladly I am not

Cobra
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4 posted 1999-08-04 06:08 PM

Exactly why I wrote this poem! Sometimes we all feel like we're on the verge of suicide. True? Well, this was about a girl who was badly mistreaten. So in response, she subjected herself to the power of evil! I hope no one ever tries to attempt that. Be happy!

Thanks Psycodillica! And hi!

Andrew Scott
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since 1999-06-24

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5 posted 1999-08-04 06:14 PM

Yes in deed, a very dark subject. Well written Cobra.

Cobra
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6 posted 1999-08-04 06:26 PM

Thanks Andrew! I thought it was well written too...

Magic Bunny
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7 posted 1999-08-04 06:47 PM

Very Dark... I like it!

Cobra
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8 posted 1999-08-04 06:49 PM

Thanks bunches Bunny! Yes, it was VERY dark...

Balladeer

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9 posted 1999-08-04 07:03 PM

Isn't it interesting all the different avenues that lie within our minds? You brought one out in a very interesting, and well written, manner. What else lurks up there?

Cobra
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since 1999-07-27

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10 posted 1999-08-04 07:14 PM

Honestly Balladeer, I really don't know what lurks in my mind. Somehow I've managed to venture into some dark, unknown territory.
But, a million thanks for your kind reply...

Interlude
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11 posted 1999-08-05 12:36 PM

Devilishly clever Cammie...

Cobra
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12 posted 1999-08-05 12:38 PM

Thanks Interlude! Glad ya think so.

DreamEvil
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13 posted 1999-08-05 12:51 PM

Heavenly slice of Darkness, my dear.

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Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings?
DreamEvil©

Cobra
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14 posted 1999-08-05 02:01 PM

Why, thank you DreamEvil

By the way, I enjoy your poetry a lot.

Candy Rain
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15 posted 1999-08-05 11:55 PM

This was such a creative gothic-like poem.
Good Job.

Princess Lily
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since 1999-07-13

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16 posted 1999-08-06 12:00 PM

Very dark yet very descriptive.I like it~Lily

[This message has been edited by Princess Lily (edited 08-06-99).]

Alwye

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In the space between moments

17 posted 1999-08-06 12:15 PM

Wonderfully chilling...I enjoyed it.

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*Krista Knutson*

"Your kiss upon my face feels like a brush with grace, baby thats all it takes to take me higher..." SHeDaisy

angel girl
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since 1999-07-23

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within a whisper...

18 posted 1999-08-06 04:40 AM

Creepy. I like it. Great for Halloween.

ac
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since 1999-06-17

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19 posted 1999-08-06 01:05 PM

spine tingling and incredibly alluring at the same time...well done...

Cobra
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20 posted 1999-08-07 04:21 PM

Thank you all!

elvira
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21 posted 1999-08-09 11:47 PM

i am always fascinated by vampire "stuff"

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