Open Poetry #1 |
I Wanna Be |
TSU325 Junior Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 11Detroit, Michigan, USA |
I wanna be the woman, You see when you are sleep. I wanna be the woman, who makes you feel so weak. I wanna be the woman, Who make you feel complete. I wanna be the woman, Who makes your passion rise, I wanna be the woman, You kiss between the thys. I wanna be your everything, And set your heart afire. I wanna be the woman, The one which you desire. |
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Augchic711 Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 80O'Fallon, IL, USA |
This poem is so wonderful you captivate the total desire one has for a person and how much your heart just flows out to that person. I enjoyed reading your poetry and hope that you will continue to write. Thank you for sharing this with us. *******Augchic711******* |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
This is a extreamly nice poem...a very good idea... be careful of the little mistakes though.....see what you think of this: I wanna be the woman, You see when you're asleep. I wanna be the woman, who makes you feel so weak. (I wanna be the woman, With kisses that you greet.) I wanna be the woman, Who makes you feel complete. I wanna be the woman, Who makes your passion rise, I wanna be the woman, You kiss between the thighs. I wanna be your everything, And set your heart afire. I wanna be the woman, The one which you desire. ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald |
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Cinderella Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 152Arizona |
"Hoot" you did wonders, but the subject matter is what counts! I would love to be this woman and perhaps someday will be lucky enough to find "Mr. Right", or perhaps I have found him but don't know it? Thank you both. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
If he kissed ya once will he kiss ya again?....Be sure...with Pristine feminine hygiene spray!!!!!..... |
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