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azblond Senior Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 637The Steamy Desert 
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For two weeks she had been away And now a day early she came So excited to surprise her love She supposed she was to blame So many nights on the road away His voice different on the phone But the trials were over at last Now they’d have time alone She bought the flowers and champagne In the box a fancy new ring Hoping to ease the burdens With some of the presents she’d bring A different life from the norm She was the breadwinner for two She so hated being away But with him out of work…it had to do Her key turned silent in the lock And she slipped quietly in through the door She saw the expensive lingerie And for a minute she wasn’t quite sure Two bodies entangled together Sharing a passionate kiss Never in the realms of her mind Had she ever imagined any of this To find her husband and his lover She had suspected him having a fling But the truth was more than she expected She dropped the roses, champagne, and ring The truth lay heavy upon her mind As shock so very well can There in the arms of her husband Was not another woman, but a man She stumbled out of the room Ran all the way to the car Her husband dressed in lingerie Allowed her to get that far As the emotions overtook her body She emitted a long wrenching cry A woman she could compete with A man-she dared not even try Her hopes were shattered completely Disillusioned she drove far away But the vision in her mind That forever would stay. ------------------ For sometimes when the Darkness falls, we must surrender, take what is ours, and give what we can, and always remember love is somewhere waiting... |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Az, this really happened to my sister. I hope it didn't happen to you. Well told, my friend, well told. ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
a very good read...if i found myself in that situation, quite honestly, another man would not bother me, comparing myself to another woman would be much more painful...if you wrote from experience, i hope you are doing okay now?  ------------------ one night at the airport...Childhood Memories...eight short weeks...Music to my Ears...your countenance...just watching tv...hoarse whispers...My One and Only...Tribute to M.J....Feel the need?...serving wench...a little girl...the mistress...stolen hours...Perfection...07-20-69... insomnia...devotion...craving (adult)...Master...apart...plain...chat? ... shameless self-promotion |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
My heart dropped when I read it was a man, a twist I did not expect, as well as this loving wife. I also hope this did not happen to you. You wrote it perfectly to capture the intensity of the situation. |
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azblond Senior Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 637The Steamy Desert |
The first thing I want to Thank You all for is the concern...but no, this is not something that happened to me. I do know someone close to me it did happen to though, and that makes it a very true life piece for me. I shared her pain and tears, my house was the one she drove to, and I found I had no answers for her on this one. The concern you all showed is touching, and I am glad to be a part of a place where there are so many who care. DE...my heart goes out to your sis, betrayl of any kind tends to rip your heart to tiny pieces. ------------------ For sometimes when the Darkness falls, we must surrender, take what is ours, and give what we can, and always remember love is somewhere waiting... |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
What a shock just reading this! That guy in the poem almost maid me SICK! I am so sorry for your friend, azblond, and DE's sister. That is just too bad-wish I could express it better, but this is the best I can do...*sigh* ------------------ *Elizabeth* "Dwelt a maid belov'd and cheris'd by high and low, But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..." [This message has been edited by Elizabeth (edited 08-01-99).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Ouch....that would hurt. Well told tale. |
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azblond Senior Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 637The Steamy Desert |
Thank you all for the response on this. I think it shows how much betrayl of any kind when it is not expected can throw us for a loop. Keep a look out however for HIS version of the same story...I will be working on it soon. (The "she" in this tale was not the only one I am friends with...) ------------------ For sometimes when the Darkness falls, we must surrender, take what is ours, and give what we can, and always remember love is somewhere waiting... |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Personally, I can't believe The story I've just read. About a man in lingerie, Acting feminine in her bed. As for me, I never wear that stuff, Either on the road or at home. It interferes with spontaneous whoopie, (Especially when I'm alone). |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I'm not sure comparisons to another woman could possibly hurt more that realizing every single moment of your adult life had been a lie, every word of love had been a sham, that you'd never stood a chance... and that the self-esteem you'd gladly shattered trying to please had been sacrificed in vain. Your poem is great, azblond... but the trip down memory lane is one I wish I could have avoided. *S* |
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