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God Don't Tell Many Secrets
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God Don't Tell Many Secrets |
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Masked Intruder
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since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets 
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"God don' tell many secrets," Mama once said to me. "He keeps 'em to hisself, chil', Fo' all 'ternity." I pondered hours that night, With a young untested mind, On Olympic matters To great for me to find. When Mama lay on death's bed, And I was at her side, I whispered unto God, "Please, sir, do tell me why." But Mama turned her head, And the last she said to me, Was "Chil', don'chu listen, 'Bout lettin' secrets be? "I tol' you, chil', years long 'go, His secrets he don' tell, He keeps 'em to hisself Fo' worse o' fare ye well." I cried straight out that night, Still a child in His eyes. I again asked my questions, My neverending whys. "God don' tell many secrets," Mama once said to me. "He keeps 'em to hisself, chil', Fo' all 'ternity." ------------------ Even with a lot of imagination, does it make the story less true? |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
If you're looking for criticism, you won't find it from me. I thought this was well written and believe it will be well recieved. I really liked the second stanza.."I pondered hours that night, With a young untested mind, On Olympic matters to great for me to find." Well done.  [This message has been edited by Sally S. (edited 07-31-99).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Masked, as I've told you before, you are a very talented young writer.....the world needs to watch out for you if your talents are developed so finely so soon in life. This is a wonderful poem and reads incredibly well!! |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
I liked this one a lot.. back to the top. |
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Valor~ Junior Member
since 1999-07-31
Posts 10 |
Masked Intruder, your talent intrudes upon my poetic heart! I am looking forward to reading much more from you! ------------------ Valor~ "Poetry is language as it is most distilled and most powerful." |
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MissNTrope Junior Member
since 1999-07-29
Posts 43 |
Ah - here's where that pesky Intruder went... The Menage said you were lurking about here somewhere... |
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Delores Hall Member
since 1999-07-16
Posts 342USA |
Wouldn't it be nice if God did tell all his secrets?Then maybe we could understand things so much better.Happy writing. |
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angel girl Member
since 1999-07-23
Posts 322within a whisper... |
that was great! good job. ------------------ The world is in your hands; it is what you make of it. keep on chuggin' |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
What a great line and title, MI! "God don't tell many secrets".... I love it! Maybe I should write a poem by the same title.... hehehe... Seriously, m'friend, like I said before, this one's one of your best! Glad you brought it out of hiding. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
A fine bit of writting here. Some of the best to be found by my accounts. Thanks for sharing this jewel. I also liked the second stanza and the title. Very creative. |
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Misty Member
since 1999-08-01
Posts 121USA |
I enjoyed reading this poem. it's cute how you gave it Characteristics with the accent. Great writting keep it up, & I hope to read more of your poems soon! ------------------ ©Misty |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I whisper those why's, I scream them and sob them... and still hear silence when I listen for answers. Great poem! |
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