Open Poetry #1 |
The View (draft) |
Soleil Member
since 1999-06-12
Posts 113 |
It’s a nice view” was what he said As he gazed into her eyes, And taking her by hand he led Her gently into abundant skies. Selfish in his temperment His physical need now realized, He would not break his covenant As he gazed into her eyes. For he did not offer enduring love To the lips of red now bought And he was careful not to speak of The life in which she was caught. On the borderline to eternity As he gazed into her eyes: For her landscape held such purity He did not clutter it with lies. His hands ranged from hill to hill The horizon materialized. Spent, he finally had lost his will As he gazed into her eyes. And though it was now past sunset From the view he did not retreat For now seen in crimson silohette Was the sight he chose to complete. Looking for a change in view As he gazed into her eyes The answer was the one he knew Nestled between her quiet thighs. He then asked her to be his wife Despite his long held belief With that he changed her life. From life’s litter he had found relief. “It’s a nice view” was what he had said As he gazed into her eyes And from the sky the clouds had fled For the view was the love that ties. |
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JANNA Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 51arlington, tx usa |
Sometimes I am a little slow to really grasp what the author intended in his poetry, but if you meant what I interpreted man I'd hate to be that girl(hahaha) but very very well written and you have an obvious talent!!! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Very nicely done, Soleil... You never disappoint me.. A message need not be blatantly obvious to be effective... Keep 'em coming.. ------------------ Nan's Morsels netpoets.net/nan/index.html |
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Tequilia_Sunrise Senior Member
since 2003-02-19
Posts 612Lochalsh, Ontario, Canada |
enjoyed this |
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