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Open Poetry #1

The View (draft)

Soleil
Member

since 1999-06-12

Posts 113

0 posted 1999-06-18 10:24 PM

It’s a nice view” was what he said
As he gazed into her eyes,
And taking her by hand he led
Her gently into abundant skies.

Selfish in his temperment
His physical need now realized,
He would not break his covenant
As he gazed into her eyes.

For he did not offer enduring love
To the lips of red now bought
And he was careful not to speak of
The life in which she was caught.

On the borderline to eternity
As he gazed into her eyes:
For her landscape held such purity
He did not clutter it with lies.

His hands ranged from hill to hill
The horizon materialized.
Spent, he finally had lost his will
As he gazed into her eyes.

And though it was now past sunset
From the view he did not retreat
For now seen in crimson silohette
Was the sight he chose to complete.

Looking for a change in view
As he gazed into her eyes
The answer was the one he knew
Nestled between her quiet thighs.

He then asked her to be his wife
Despite his long held belief
With that he changed her life.
From life’s litter he had found relief.

“It’s a nice view” was what he had said
As he gazed into her eyes
And from the sky the clouds had fled
For the view was the love that ties.

JANNA
Member

since 1999-06-18

Posts 51
arlington, tx usa

1 posted 1999-06-19 12:03 PM

Sometimes I am a little slow to really grasp what the author intended in his poetry, but if you meant what I interpreted man I'd hate to be that girl(hahaha) but very very well written and you have an obvious talent!!!

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

2 posted 1999-06-20 08:25 AM

Very nicely done, Soleil...
You never disappoint me.. A message need not be blatantly obvious to be effective... Keep 'em coming..

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Tequilia_Sunrise
Senior Member

since 2003-02-19

Posts 612
Lochalsh, Ontario, Canada

3 posted 2004-07-04 11:15 PM

enjoyed this

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