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Cobra
Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 58

0 posted 1999-07-30 03:53 PM

His unkind words pound in head,
his actions drove me insane.
He didn't know how sad I was,
he only knew my pain.

Now I've flown from his grasp,
I'm free from uncertainties.
But memories of his evil ways,
have kept this heart from ease.

Everytime I make a wish,
he'll be there to shatter my dreams.
Everytime I hear a laugh,
he'll twist them into screams.

No matter what I'm hoping for,
he'll tell me there's no chance.
No matter who I'm dreaming with,
he'll ruin that romance.

I can't escape the thoughts of him,
he'll always, always be there.
In the mirror he'll laugh at me,
it doesn't matter where.

And whenever I look at a man,
I'm overcome with fear.
I'm afraid he'll be just like,
that devil in the mirror.

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Cammie

Mystic
Junior Member

since 1999-07-22

Posts 13

1 posted 1999-07-30 04:02 PM

Fabulous!

Magic Bunny
Junior Member

since 1999-07-26

Posts 18

2 posted 1999-07-30 04:04 PM

He sounds mean! Did you really date a guy like that? How sad!

But this was a really good poem Cobra

!

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The Magical Rainbow Bunny

grandiloquent
Member

since 1999-07-08

Posts 104
Midwest America

3 posted 1999-07-30 04:04 PM

Cobra, you've caught me ... my eyes are sparkling.

Interlude
New Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 9

4 posted 1999-07-30 04:20 PM

Girl, was he really like that? You KNOW you deserve better than that! It's probably only a poem, but if it's all true, you got to move it on up!

Candy Rain
Junior Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 10

5 posted 1999-07-30 04:22 PM

Duh... Wow... Good... Poetry...

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Forever Yours :)

White Fang
New Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 8

6 posted 1999-07-30 04:24 PM

No woman should be treated like that. You have captured that evil in a mirror. So now, every morning, I guess you must wake up to look evil in the eyes. Very well written. ^_^

Cobra
Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 58

7 posted 1999-07-30 04:56 PM

Thanks you guys!

Mystic,
Thanks! You're FABULOUS yourself!

Magic Bunny,
Thanks for caring! I'm glad you thought my poem was good.

Grandiloquent,
My eyes are still sparkling from your kind reply. Thank you!

Interlude,
I have moved up and I'm living the good life. Thanks!

Candy Rain,
Duh thanks... Wow, you like it... Good thing you enjoyed it... Poetry is even better when people like it... Like you! Thanks!

White Fang,
Those were captivating words. I'm glad you thought it was well written. Thank you!

XOXOXOX ALL!

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Cammie

Craig
Member

since 1999-06-10

Posts 444

8 posted 1999-07-30 05:02 PM

This was special, you kept it going smoothly from start to finish and topped it off with a great ending.

Well done

Cobra
Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 58

9 posted 1999-07-30 05:05 PM

Thanks so much Craig! I'm trying so hard to perfect my poetry. I feel more confident when I recieve nice replies like yours.

Andrew Scott
Member Elite

since 1999-06-24

Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA

10 posted 1999-07-30 05:20 PM

DAMN, him. DAMN him all to hell! Seriously, I really despise people who use such power to destroy the joy of others. I hope he and his effects are left far, far behind. Buried so deep that he can feel the flames of hell itself.
You write well. Keep them coming, and thanks for looking in on my own.

Cobra
Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 58

11 posted 1999-07-30 05:50 PM

Yeah! Damn him to hell! Whoops. Hee Hee. He's long gone and thank god. Thank you too Andrew!

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Cammie

LngJhnAg
Member Elite

since 1999-07-23

Posts 3508
Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

12 posted 1999-07-30 09:50 PM

yoo hoo - Cammie - your cactus awaits you in poetry challenge - I think you'll like it - but it is freezing in there - lol

Cobra
Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 58

13 posted 1999-07-30 09:57 PM

Cool! Can't wait to see how you handled my challenge!

Cobra
Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 58

14 posted 1999-07-31 02:32 AM

Hey, thanks LngJhnAg. Your poem was real good. Anybody reading this should go and see the great poem he wrote in response to my challenge! It located in (duh!) the Poetry Challenge!

XOXOXO
Cammie

elvira
Senior Member

since 1999-07-06

Posts 936
California

15 posted 1999-08-02 08:59 AM

it got something completely different out of this poem...our inner critic, our negative voice that tells us we'll never find happiness...it read very well from that perspective

Cobra
Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 58

16 posted 1999-08-03 02:45 AM

Thanks Elvira! This poem was difficult to write because my experience wasn't really that bad. It just sort of...POPPED into my head...

angel girl
Member

since 1999-07-23

Posts 322
within a whisper...

17 posted 1999-08-03 04:37 AM

wow, great job! i'm speechless.

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The world is in your hands; it is what you make of it.

keep on chuggin'

Cobra
Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 58

18 posted 1999-08-04 02:17 PM

Thanks Angel Girl!

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