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SpaRrkLe_GoDdeSs New Member
since 1999-07-29
Posts 4 |
As the future rolls forth I ponder my reason for being Destiny drives my wings Where I will land rests unknown Play that sweet song again I have forgotten the taste The flavour is slowly changing Rememberabce is like a dream Slowly deminishing in the light Each step I take is detected I cannot as of yet comprehend Slowly breezes switch direction Like a water lily I dance Sing to me in a foreign tongue Your voice is so beautiful Melting like wax on my spine As the flames surround me I dare to forget But the images are caught in stone. I am a 17 year old who is merely interested in the the art of poetry and would love to be critiqued on my style. My poem is about love and how it is difficult to forget the passions and emotions surrounding love. ANd by the way, does anyone think I hae the potential to become a poet? THanx for taking the time to read my poem. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
spaRkle, your style is good. May I direct you to the Critique Forum? There we can analyze your poem in detail and, perhaps, give constructive suggestions that may help. Can you become a poet? That's like a baby asking if he can become a human. You ARE a poet...by birth...as we all are. How well you are able to express your poetic abilities will remain to be seen. I'd say, if this poem is any indication of things to come, you are off to a flying start! |
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