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Out of Giving |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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You said you wanted happiness, A though that sounded great. You said you needed peace of mind I offered you a plate. You said you wanted me around. I showed you how to make it. I gave the opportunity How come you didn't take it? You know the things I need to have. My life's an open door And, in return I'd give and give, And then I'd give some more. But, either I am very dumb Or you're not very smart. While I spent my time giving, You were taking me apart. You never tried to understand What I was all about And now, instead of giving, I have simply given out. Frustration makes my muscles ache But life is for the living. How sad you finally came to take When I was out of giving. |
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Craig Member
since 1999-06-10
Posts 444 |
You've done it again, Captured a feeling in ink (or in this case typographical production reproduced in binary format) Craig (still posting still reading) |
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Genea Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 321USA |
Balladeer, I like it - simple and direct. ~Genea |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Hey - Didn't I say that HappiNess was "giving and giving"? or was that love?? 'twas one of them for sure - Nice one M&M... |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
Excellent work as usual, you have captured the give and take of a onesided relationship. Unfortunately I can relate all too well... Keep those wonderful poems coming! |
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jfreak Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306Yuma, AZ, USA |
Hey M&M, Thanx for the other poem you sent me. I sent it to my gal, she liked it a lot. This poem is a great one, you truly have a gift for grabbing the human spirit and putting it down on paper. Totally awesome. Jfreak |
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Wintersurfer Junior Member
since 1999-06-14
Posts 16 |
Balladeer~ Are you sure you aren't me in a parallel universe? What a gift--to allow the reader to believe that the words you write fit their own life so perfectly...saying, "That has to be written for me"! Thank you for giving just a little bit more! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I thank you all wholeheartedly and especially to you, Nan, for introducing me to this wonderful group. |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
Another fine one Balladeer. You've a great talent. fh |
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ac Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 129Cayey, PR - USA |
Wonderfully put...i marvel at how you put into such simple words something that's all too familiar for me ...you definetely inspire me... |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Balladeer, looks like this could have been one of your first Masterpieces here at Passions, so I shall boost it to the front for a second round. Great piece of work, as always.  |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
How could I have missed this! A day without Balladeer is like a day without sunshine!  |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
i liked it also mister balladeer is been a joy to watch the master evolve |
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Sue Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 383France |
Thank you, Lost Dreamer, for bringing this one to the front, otherwise I might never have read it. Balladeer, that is good, did you know? |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
So well done my friend, you took the words right out of my mouth! I couldn't of explained it better (even tho I tried). |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Our Balladeer only speaks words of truth. Too bad we cannot clone him, forsooth! ------------------ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Well done!!! |
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