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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion 
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“Why are you looking at me?” you ask. “Is something wrong? Are you concerned?” I continue to watch you in your task. Yes, I was staring. So... what have I learned? Behind your ear I discovered a site, Where no other man could have been. The place where I kissed you last night, And where I long to kiss again. I saw for the hundredth time your hair, The way it bounces when you turn your head. It was like the first time, I swear, When we laid together in our bed. I found the man I wanted to be, As you focused on your chore. Your form beguiled him out of me, Have I learned anything more? I noticed the way your mouth turned down, As you bent to straighten what you’d done. I heard the music of your whispered sounds, As you thought of things yet to come. I caught your profile in the light, As you turned and wondered why, I would smile at your disheveled sight, With this enchantment in my eye. “Why are you looking at me?” you ask. “Is something wrong? Are you concerned?” To answer demands I bend to the task, And try to explain what it is I’ve learned. Do you know that in you I find, Everything I need, and then some more? Hope and love and peace of mind, Dreams come true, like never before. If you could only see through my eyes As I stand here watching you. I’m sure your questions would find replies To the many things I thought you knew. My silence is not because I find, Something wrong or of concern. It’s just that I can’t believe you’re mine, It’s only now I’m beginning to learn. |
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Gentle Soul Member
since 1999-07-12
Posts 273Vinton,Ohio USA |
wow.. I like it..  hehe.. "is speechless" but I like it.. lol------------------ Gënt£ë¤§°û£ |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Thank you, oh Soulful One. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Yeah, here I stumble onto this sweltering piece from the two Love Birds who ne'er seperate! Jeeze, you guys have no idea what a precious thing you have....a love like that. Well, I take that back, I think you DO know how lucky you both are! Keep the fire burning, and I give you thumbs up!! ------------------ I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
How did I miss this one before...it's so nice to feel their happiness..:-)) HUGS ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
How very touching! You truly are a lucky man, Long John, to be in love like this. I enjoyed reading this one. ------------------ *Elizabeth* "Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low, But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..." |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
LJA: Tis beautiful... the poem and what you have with Lor!!! Congrats, you two. |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
All I can say is WOW!! Really loved it and you are such an incredibly blessed couple! ------------------ Words lay dormant in the recesses of the mind til called forth to a labor of love. By WildChild |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
You've expressed feelings many of us have felt at one time or another. Well done. |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Oh...SO awesome! What a marvelous way you have of expressing that love ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Wow! It is wonderful to see love like this! What a lovely poem! Keep the fires burning! |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Most excellent Long John! You have truly put your heart into this beautiful piece. I too have received just such a response for staring to long, contemplating how fortunate I am in this life to have one such her. It's a nice feeling to have. Once again, a great work. Thanks for sharing. |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Gorgeous. You are both very lucky to have found one another. Toast to LongJohn and Lorelei ... ------------------ "Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus" (Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.") |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
This is beautiful, you are both a gift to one another, and sharing your gratitude in a poem is brilliant. Thanks for sharing it with all of us also. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Well done my friend......I kept waitin' for a real "stick" at the end....but ya kept it serious?.....Good job anyhow pal.... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is precious! |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Always liked this one so up to the top. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I love this and so happy MartyJo brought it to the top...excellent write |
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