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Ron
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-05-19
Posts 8669Michigan, US 
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The wheel, it turns from year to year, The seasons shift and disappear. Suns rise and set like metronome, And time constrains all things I've known. It took ten billion years of time For stars to form from cosmic grime. Another billion years or more For life to crawl from ocean's shore. Just sixty thousand years have passed Since on the earth mankind trespassed, And only five of those have shown Society as we have known. Two score and nine I've sought my place In time's enduring, sweet embrace, With quiet queries still thought of - How long's it take to fall in love? Is love an instant happenstance? A quantum spark afire by chance? A moment timed by shooting star? One breath you're not, the next you are? Or does it track predicted course, All stemming from predicted source? One step, then two, as placed in time, A path we walk, a hill we climb? Does love begin with newfound trust? Or does it start as feral lust? Should loved one first be just a friend? And when do love's beginnings end? If this were measured on a graph, How could we do romantic math? Plot time on X, and depth on Y? What kind of curve would love inscribe? And could we find a point in time When trust and lust and hope combine? When all beginnings must become A greater whole than just their sum? The eons thrash and ages writhe, As Legends turn to obscure myth, But epochs speak still nothing of How long it takes to fall in love. |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Perhaps a quantum spark of chance, Or just a simple happenstance ~ Love's found behind a cryptic door, Once opened thou shall quest no more. Love does depend on mutual trust Embodied by intrinsic lust. The one we love must be a friend, Or love's beginning's bound to end. There is a time surpassed by none, When trust and lust, as love, are one. Clandestine dreams, entrust to each ~ The Sun shall rise within thy reach. To fall in love does not take long. Hearts know at once when they belong. Seems whether near or from afar, One beat they're not, the next they are.  |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
This is awe-inspiring. I have no other way to put it. ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
AMAZING! The very first verse drew me totally into your words. I was expecting a poem about some cosmic riddle and there it was, in the fourth verse: the poem is about THE cosmic riddle. I'm sure they are questions that anyone who has known true love has pondered over for many a long hour. And now some words to Nan... AMAZING TOO! These are some of the answers, for who can ever answer all that makes up love? and you know another thing that impressed me? *cheeky grin* I didn't need a dictionary to read this one *8) |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Both of these poems are marvelous! This is my favorite: Is love an instant happenstance? A quantum spark afire by chance? A moment timed by shooting star? One breath you're not, the next you are? A great way to question when love happens. Gosh, it's good to see you here, Ron. And Nan, was this a collaboration or a response? Either way, wonderful, just wonderful! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
I very much liked your poems. You "guys" are very talented... |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
*sigh*...if only i could rhyme like this...*sigh*...such talent indeed  ------------------ If I had my mouth I would bite. If I had my liberty I would do my liking. In the mean time, let me be that I am, and seek not to alter me. ~~~Shakespeare~~~ |
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Ladycat 
since 1999-07-05
Posts 782At the edge and a doorway,TX |
Once again I get to sit back in my seat and ponder.. Love.. I Love Love.. Thank you for another wonderful piece.. Love, Lady ------------------ Live in my world just once and you'll find yourself enraptured. |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Ron, Nan, your work is truly an inspiration to me...these words trip off the tongue so beautifully and comfortably. ------------------ ~onevoice~ "I never kissed somebody so that they would break my heart." |
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Ron
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-05-19
Posts 8669Michigan, US |
Thank you, everyone, for the kind words. This is a finished (sic) version of a poem that has been floating around for several months, ever since two dear people (both poets who post here) introduced me to the whole strange concept of cyber-romance. The idea of two people falling in love who hadn't met raised a lot of questions in my mind, and this was my humble attempt to ask those questions. I'm glad so many enjoyed it and, yes, I've certainly noted more than a few poems posted with answers. Whether they're the right answers or not? And, Nan, you never cease to amaze me. That's twice now you've unexpectedly mimiced my style so closely I can't tell where I stop and you begin. Next time I want a poem, I think I'll just give you the subject and let you write it for me! [This message has been edited by Ron (edited 07-27-99).] |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
...ummmm..... I'll need some spare time first - but if you'd like, I can put it at the top of my list   |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
What a delightful find ... two for the price of one~ Wonderful Ron~  AND Nan~ Gosh, I like this archiving stuff~  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Reading some oldies but goodies.  |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I think it's time you folks met the requirement of a duet in Open 27.... don't you think? |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Sigh - this still takes my breath away... |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
archives are awesome and this poem? Its even more awesome! Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
I found another little treasure in the archives...... I love your poetry Ron....It has such a calming affect on me!!!! Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
A treasure within these pages blue of which I find this morning... Lucky4me and to those who also gather around to take a peak today cuz I truly enjoyed the read PoetFriend... Smiles2u *~coco~* |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I happen to think that Coco has excellent taste. I don't believe I've read this'n before, but I'm glad it was brought to my attention now. I'm impressed, Ron. You should write more often. nod. (ducking as I run...) |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
makes me wish you would write more |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Oh for God's sake...even Ron is younger than me...*sigh* "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Bringing me a wonderful smile today...  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
WOW! Ron, I never read this before, it is stunning! LOL, and I love Nan's mirrored write. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Sighh, just what I needed today... Beautiful Ron.. and Nan.. yours too A duet would be wonderful don't you think?...Ron?...Nan?..........hello? I'm keeping it. Maree Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
How lovely! I have to wonder about cyber romance myself, and to this day just do not get it. I thought I would dust some shelves in the archives |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
"The eons thrash and ages writhe, As Legends turn to obscure myth, But epochs speak still nothing of How long it takes to fall in love." Preferably, love should start by being friends.It is a matter of balance.The most we need is hugging, a bit of loving, good talk, a feeling of togetherness, in mind and soul. Someone you can be intimate with and share a certain freeness with, someone with whom to share the laughter. And most of all respect. It takes time and caring, there is no pefection, although we can dream. This is what I feel after having shared 47 reasonably happy years with one man. Best marty |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I've decided to try ignoring you. . . . Was that enough? grin Happy Birthday Ron. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
The years pass by uncounted but the minutes I know by name each second since I’ve loved you no measurement is the same The time it took to make a star means naught to me you see for in that star I see the love that I wish you had for me The jungle beasts may be subdued but my heart will not be tamed I’ll not hold back a nanosecond though to say this, I’m ashamed My love took not a moment to find a home in my heart I know not when it will end nor am I sure when it did start In the clock held in my heart time is measured not in space but measured in the times I’m held within your loving embrace |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Because I'm younger I can wait (as long as I don't smoke too much) Because I'm braver I can take the pokes and prods of "that's enough" of ladies of agility wishing I would go away and stop this plague on your birthday (as if I'd had enough to say) Happy, happy, birthday sweets! Kiss me! TWICE! I'm Gemini! Kiss me thrice before I die wishing you were mine... (forgive me. I'm just bein' naughty.)  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Happy Birthday, Ron! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Nifty! Two for the click of one! You two write so similar in this I thought Nan's was a continuation of yours Ron. I read this before but came back for more. |
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ladylisa Member
since 2007-04-29
Posts 342Florida USA |
Truly inspiring!!!! Have often pondered the moment of love. I believe it is when we become selfless that it happens. Just my own opinion. Enjoyed the read. |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
sooo very poetic but still kept your logic. a wonderful piece and wonderful again enjoyed |
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