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Open Poetry #1

Her eyes closed...

poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25

Posts 2646
Arkansas

0 posted 1999-07-25 05:25 PM

Once upon a lonely night
a child's mind began to wander
upon some things she knew weren't right.
Her eyes closed once, and tears did fall
she dreamed of life & joy & smiles
but between her & these, there stood a wall.
Her eyes closed twice, & her blood ran cold
and as she dreamed of laughter, of love
bitterness - on her heart - took hold.
Her eyes closed thrice,she dreamed of a heart unknown...
and of a raging storm that swept her soul
because her lover's eyes had turned to stone...
Her eyes closed once more - her tears fell again
she dreamed of death, that blessed escape -
then she bowed her head & said, "Amen..."
She closed her eyes one last time, vowing her lids would never part...
But one last tear had to swell & stream down the cheek -
of a child who then died of a broken heart...

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- poet FemmeFatale

"The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet

Delores Hall
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since 1999-07-16

Posts 342
USA

1 posted 1999-07-26 12:58 PM

This is a beautiful poem.Happy writing.

amber
Member

since 1999-06-15

Posts 240
los banos, ca,

2 posted 1999-07-31 07:54 PM

dreams are always the most important, and it hurts to have to dream of death as an escape, ive been there before, wonderful poem.

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

3 posted 1999-07-31 08:29 PM

I really liked the unusual rythym you chose to use with this one....it really helped to make this poem work. Nice Job!

Alwye

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since 1999-06-16

Posts 3850
In the space between moments

4 posted 1999-07-31 09:08 PM

Very sad and beautiful, poetFemmeFatale.

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*Krista Knutson*

"I will sail my vessel 'till the river runs dry, like a bird upon the wind, these waters are my sky..." Garth Brooks

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